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By Snodlander
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11 October 2007 |
If it goes tump-ti-tump and rhymes, it must be poetry.
Mustn't it?
I'm old school, me, and when I pour my soul
On white and naked paper, bare and clear,
The meter rings like Sunday church bell toll.
The pulse of feelings' march sounds in my ear.
Into this beat words chosen for their rhyme
Must yet not show the twisting, there to fit.
So rhythm, rhyme and meaning intertwine,
Or not.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3360 comments posted) 11th October 2007 | No only does it go tump-ti-tump and rhymes but it's also clever and witty,if only some others could learn by your example. I can't remember who said "Writing blank verse is like playing tennis with the net down" but I'm sure he'd approve of this.
I do hope you're not going to forsake the comedy forum for poetry, though. We can't afford to lose our best men like this.
Jane | Do You Know
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 11th October 2007 | | I'll bet anything that you read Grey's Elegy - because when I read your poem, the rhythm and the rhyming technique from this poem. Well done! You may not believe this, but I like rhythmic and rhyming poems too, but I think that there is beauty in well written blank verse, but, unfortunately you do not see it very often. What often passes for "blank verse" is a piece of prose, badly written but split up into lines of varying length. Children of 5 have to learn about rhythm in poetry today - and they have to write it. So what goes wrong between then and when they leave school? |
Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 11th October 2007 | Umm ... OK, I feel a tad embarrassed now. Please don't hoist on me the mantle of blank verse assassin. I have, when feeling particularly uninspired, maudlin or drunk, penned a free verse or two. Free, because I wouldn't be able to sell them.
I have nothing at all against free verse, nor free poets. I just don't understand the medium, is all. At least with proper poetry you can say, 'oops, it went tump there when it should have gone ti.'
And I went and looked up Grey's Elegy, to see if I was inspired by it, not that I'm an ignorant philistine, you understand. It's just, erm, I'm still a tad concussed. Yes, that's it. And I can see what you mean about the 10 beat line and abab rhyme. But that's the only comparison, I'm afraid.
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3360 comments posted) 11th October 2007 | Too late, dear heart, You've set the seal on it now and we will cheer you on from the safety of the side lines while you take it full on the chin. No use trying to back track you know how sensitive they are about their art. They are rolling out the tumbrill as we speak and composing fitting diatibes in free verse just to make you suffer
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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 12th October 2007 | But we wouldn't understand it in all likelihood.
Liked this Bob. I have a bit of a liking for iambic pentameter - which someone will probably inform this is not - but it's close enough for me. And as Jane says, witty with it.
Phil. |
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