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Poetry
Fervour
By Flippy_D
24 March 2005
I'll take a blade into chapel with me,
And I'll grip it because it's real.
I'll bury myself in dulled metal whilst God-in-words swirls around me in a crimson rush.
A robed weight.
Stone angels bow their heads to lower their gruesomely placid faces at me and me alone.

Stained glass seeps insidiously and stains air, dust floats from dead Bibles, songbooks.
The choir breathes it in, and chokes,
Slamming out Psalms.
A cacophony of ritual wraps plundered ideas in echoes and pricking incense,
And dead priests stretch smiles forever in the church tombs.

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Lost
Written by LilGryphMaster (11 comments posted) 24th March 2005
I think your message gets lost in the big words you use.. It just doesn't flow, and I find myself tripping over each stanza.

Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 30th March 2005
I think this could be adressed by breaking up some of the longer lines and re arranging the poem a little. 
 
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Powerful
Written by Betsie (30 comments posted) 15th April 2005
This is strong stuff Flippy - wonderful use of words. 
 
Would Dogma be a better title?
response
Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 30th June 2005
er...the big words you use complement the sound and support the tone ..and lordy - they aint big words ....no, really ...

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