Tongue in cheek.
Been fiddling with this for some time. It's got the better of me.
(Contains profanity)
Musing
The gentle art of laying words
And deepest thoughts upon the page
Evokes in some a wistful sigh -
In feelings deep and letters sage
Our own experience is heard.
Reader then, approach with care;
For some require a note exact.
Our entry into poets’ world
Is entry into devil’s pact.
Advance, soak in, respond, beware.
The thoughts we have are not of us.
Implanted by the writer where
Our brains dissect and wonder why
This self appointed Yeat’s* heir
Is waxing woeful words of pus.
Don’t dare attack the writer’s muse
For poetry is sacrosanct
Where any verse is art on high.
No matter how the writer wanked,
It’s not for you to disabuse.
* Delete and replace as appropriate
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Written by fellpony (1652 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
| It's stanza 3 where you've lost your way isn't it Phil - the rest is very good indeed and will undoubtedly earn you a lot of flak. Get your flame suit on boyo (or stand behind mine, if you prefer). |
Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
You're quite right, of course. I've fiddled around with this like mad. Changed several times but returned to the original - but I know what I mean, and that's all that matters - right? 
Phil. |
Great!
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
I loved this, Phil. Let's have some more like this.
Yeats? Hmmm? Well, you are in the right season! |
Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
Tongue in cheek or not, it feels like you were trying to get something off your chest here, Phil? Perhaps a few stray heirs??
If your opinion of some would-be poets is correct, I’m surprised that they can see their keyboards sufficiently well to allow them to write poetry, as I understand that it makes you go blind!!
That said; all that has happened to me is that I am slightly short sighted, so I’m obviously not trying hard enough. Although if I tried, hard enough, I probably would go blind!!
I shall continue to attack and masturbate with the best of them, yourself included, although preferably not at the same time.
All the best,
Steve.
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Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
Yes, it's the muses, and although they may look frail, their are kin to the gods. Attacking them would surely anger Apollo, and his bow is swift and deadly. Look how he avenged the desacration of his priestess on the beach of Troy, and then imagine how much worse his rage will be if you touch a muse herself...
Watch out Steve, for perhaps that short sightednessmight only be the beginning  |
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 14th October 2007 |
good un mate
Bernie |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 15th October 2007 |
Liked the title, I found that amusing.
A very measured and well constructed rant which somehow added to it's message.
As someone who was told I should not review poetry because I didn't write it and so didn't know how hard it was, I find a rich message in this. [which begs the queston- if it's that hard, how is it that, this month, there are 52 poems to 2 comedy posts.
I think I must have missed the profanity, unless onanism has become and ungodly act.
cheers
Jane |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 15th October 2007 |
*clap* bravo! I like this a lot, both in wording and in message. Have to agree with fellpony that the third stanza is a bit confusing. As for the message, I see it as testament to the fact that a vital part of writing poetry is not taking yourself too seriously.
Jane- in my opinion, writing poetry is easy. Writing good poetry is, however, something else altogether. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 15th October 2007 |
| Fair comment G K I won't argue with that. |
Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 15th October 2007 |
Thanks for reading and commenting. Seems I didn't need a flak jacket.  
Phil. |
HI Phil
Written by jean.day (2326 comments posted) 16th October 2007 |
| I enjoyed this one too. As a writer of bad poetry myself, I could somewhat identify with your writer. I know that was not your intention - but it is possible to get quite a lot of pleasure out of writing poety which others might term bad. |
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