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Poetry
In make-up
By no1butClo
15 October 2007

Rubbish ending again?

help me out here

clo


In make-up, lipstick for the lines,
liner for the look, base for the face 
of a let-down mother, abandoned lover,
clown [it's all in the eyes]

The limelight - usually unkind -
pays the courtesy of hiding the spectators,
intruders on the soft affair that plays
twixt wright and actor.

At home, rinsing out the curls
of a character incredible once the
lights go out, I wonder why
I can't quite feel them die.

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Written by fellpony (1600 comments posted) 15th October 2007
once you've played a character - really played, and not just read - part of it stays with you for life.  
 
Lucky you're a girl though - I remember a boyfriend who at 21 played G&S's Major General and had to grey his beard. At the end of the week's run, what with grey and flesh coloured greasepaint, he found it faster to return to being clean shaven than to cleanse the beard. 
 
Nice one Clo, and not a bad ending despite your misgivings.
Yes
Written by patterjack (1175 comments posted) 15th October 2007
and i never want to play Iago again -- and not even Falstaff if it come to that  
 
I was nearly always cast as some kind of villain-- that may be the reason for what i am now now  
 
Well , any excuse 
 
 
patterjack 
 

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 15th October 2007
Which is why am a bad actor. I may write of people who are totally different, but can't play them. To totally let go of yourself and adopt the character's ways is far too scary. The other side of the coin you show us here is that it also means a good actor can be anything he or she wants, just by playing it. 
Perhaps I should take some classes again, eventhough I lack the talent. 
 
Nothing wrong with the ending, as that's contains the main message of the piece.
Agree
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 15th October 2007
with Fledermaus, the ending gives the whole point of the poem.  
 
I didn't realise there were so many thespians on GW!  
 
I can only claim a role as Lady Evelyn Lovejoy in some stupid farce many years ago!  
Not my scene, too much time taken up with rehearsals when I had things to do and places to go.

Written by Phil (6681 comments posted) 15th October 2007
Liked this, and it was the final lines that gave this what it has. You may not like the way you've expressed it, but it finishes the piece well. 
 
Phil

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