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Poetry
Tiger-eyes
By Zeinah
16 October 2007
This is about a horse with golden eyes. He was given to me because no one could work with him and no one wanted him. I had to learn patience, he had to learn to trust.
We both succeeded.

Golden eyes, orange moons,
Tiger in the dark,
And as agile, as beguiling.
Aloof existence, nervous in the milling crowds
Or under the clumsy hand.
But in the distance, regal and proud, surveying your space.
Ignorant of the appreciative stares and praise.   
Tail, proud-high and wind-spread.
Suspended stepping in cadenced rhythm
Reaching rolling knees with hooves flicking.
A natural dancer.
Hocks flexed like springs coiled, to lift every stride
In flouncing action, neck arched, snorting in feigned surprise
At the moving earth, flirting with your fancies.

You regard me with those eyes of amber,
An enigmatic gaze that I can not help but return.
Prying deep to see if I will be the one you can trust
After so many disappointments.
You allow me to, only just, brush your skin with my fingertips,
Something rare in itself.
Muscle-bound frame tensed in anticipation, reaching with your nose,
Another butterfly kiss...
Eyes rimmed with white, blowing down to my outstretched palm,
A tentative step...
And finally you leap the barriers and come to me,
Your head heavy against my chest, cares cradled in my arms.
Tiger eyes heavy lidded, tiger purring.
And then the embrace is over, something only you can see
catches your attention and you are away, trotting on air.
Glancing at me, you curve back with capricious flare
watching me admire you, eyes full of sunset light.
You are my own,
And I am honoured.

Reviews

Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 16th October 2007
for a horseman, one of those wonderful moments ... and not a bad poem either, capturing those moments when we humans sometimes see as the horse does.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 16th October 2007
I do like your detailed descriptions of the horse, they're very vivid. However your comparison of it with another animal doesn't sit well with me. Horses are not like tigers, however bright their eyes may be, and it seems strange to compare a tentative animal to one which is generally known to be a violent hunter. 
The second stanza came across as more of a piece of love poetry, but that might just be me...

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 16th October 2007
Enjoyed this very much. It does seem to reach into that tentative space between human and beast that we can only guess at - even if we think we've experienced it. 
 
Phil.
Loved your poem
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 17th October 2007
I loved your poem Zeinah. I also have the special quality which is needed to encourage shy or frightened animals and birds to come to me and put their trust in me. I have moorhens who come to my backdoor. You wonder what has caused this animal to be so nervous. I loved your descriptions. They are a painting in words. I also am not too happy with the link with the tiger for the horse has very different qualities.

Written by Zeinah (2 comments posted) 17th October 2007
Thanks for all the crits :) Just want to quickly explain why I made the comparison to a tiger... It was more about the movement, this horse is very cat-like and regal movement-wise, he looks like a wild cat padding through the woods when he walks. He was also very much a loner and had a wildness in his nature that was almost aggressive when I first met him, mainly because he was always having to fight and defend himself, so I wanted to compare him to that side of a tiger. The eyes were just another feature that fitted into the comparison, the colour... but mostly the look in his eyes, which until recently was very much like a predator. 
 
As for the love poetry... well, thats exactly right! We fell in love with each other! ;)

Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 24th October 2007
I like this very much, and thought that the tiger comparison was effective, although without the introduction you gave I might have been confused. 
It actually made me think of the job I currently have working with an Autistic man. I don't mean to compare him to an animal, just that your description of the patience-trust balance was right on for me.

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