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By man_in_the_box
16 October 2007
So this was another piece of my lyrical prose (again, cheers phil), but I decided to slice it into a  somewhat more "poetic" structure, if for no other reason than to please those who cannot begin to fathom something to be poetry unless it resembles a limerick or heiku.  I like it less this way.  Enjoy.

Hordes of flesh,
shaped like humans,
in an ongoing torrent of small talk and unpleasantaries. 

What do they expect of me? 
These soulless bags of processed meat,
mimicking humanity, faking personality. 

I suppress my not entirely irrational irritation;
I bite my tongue until my mouth is half filled with blood that tastes like paperclips. 

I bite and bite until, mid-conversation, 
the best part of an inch of bloody muscle
flops against my bottom front teeth. 

I gape, allowing the blood to stream down my previously pristine shirt. 
I gaze up at the meatman before me,
as this chunk of tongue drops from the side of my open mouth
and into my lap. 

The skin filled with meat pays no mind,
just seven pounds sterling
and continues, like all the others, on his way.

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Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 16th October 2007
I'm not sure it was the physical form that made me say 'lyrical prose', rather than 'poetry'. Still, chopping up the lines does accentuate the faint rhythms this has - so perhaps worth it. 
 
I liked this a lot. I was with you all the way - not comfortable!  
 
Not sure if you want an opinion on poetry v. prose. For what it's worth: definitely not prose, more rhythmic than the last two. Probably poetry. However, not sure it matters, as it was, for me, an effective bit of writing. 
 
Phil.

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