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| By Matthiasrising | ||||||||||
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This is my latest work. Literally just wrote it. Tell me what you think and constructively what to improve. I usually just go with my ideas in writing, so I don't always know where my poems are going or what they really mean. Any ideas on this one. Jagged shadows on the wall Cast by the frenetic candle flame. I’ve been wrestling with it, This creature I keep inside my den. Time again to feed the monster. Eyes wide responding to the indulgence. Feed the alligator; Cram the sedatives down the cold throat. Pace yourself, digging so fast On a mission to china. Want to end up in the forbidden city. It isn’t so sacred anymore. It’s just communist. Digging with the bent silver fork; The only china you can reach is porcelain. Feed the alligator; Cram the sedatives down the cold throat. Pace yourself, digging so fast On a mission to china. The only china you’ll reach is the cracked plate. Slave to the hunger, unrepentant glutton. Forget the other six; this is your cardinal sin: This carnal feeding frenzy Eating you inside. Feed the damn alligator. Stuff it in. I can’t wrestle this giant; Knocks over the table. Candle falls by the window drape. Ignore the fire; Keep on eating. Gotta feed the alligator.
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