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Poetry
Ink
By Keller
17 October 2007
Your words are needled into me
so that I can never forget
how you first made me feel.
Though everything fades over time:
even bruises turn yellow
and leave my skin unscarred.
But I've laughed at myself
and not judged by my own standards,
sometimes we all need to
take a step back.

Have you seen the way
he looks at me -
I know now that I too can be lucky
And it's more than
tickets and stickers: One day
you realise those things
don't really matter.

I've buried my face in your letters
and thrown bottles at them.
You're so much simpler these days,
or maybe I'm more used to complication,
I've lived with this heart so long
it's hard to tell the difference.
I don't know where this is heading,
I barely know how it began:
perhaps in a tent in a garden,
or was it just your smile
that caught me.

Reviews

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 17th October 2007
One of those pieces that makes me go "Aaaaah" :) just beautiful. I love the simplicity of this piece, and the way that you manage to be original in wording at the same time. 
A couple of minor points- in the last two lines of the first stanza I think the "to" should be carried to the second line. And I would put a full stop at the end of the third line of the second stanza. Otherwise thanks for the read.

Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 18th October 2007
enjoyed this, especially the third stanza. Which of us hasn't felt both these urges -  
I've buried my face in your letters 
and thrown bottles at them. 
 
The people we care for have an amazing ability to inspire both!

Written by man_in_the_box (13 comments posted) 18th October 2007
I liked it, it felt really mellow and dreamlike. It was the style more than the themes that really had me sucked in. Hard to describe how I felt when I finished reading. It kept me in its grasp (that sounds so lame) afterwards because the end felt so downplayed (not the right word, but as close as I can find), not conclusive. That's what I thought was cool.

Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 18th October 2007
It sounds like something that's not really over... look, pay attention, others do but I really want you to. It's got this yearning-but-wish-I-weren't-but-glad-I-am convolution to it and it's confoundingly engaging like cabaret jazz. My favourite line is, "You're so much simpler these days". I'm not sure why, but I really like how that line feels. Bravo.

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 19th October 2007
A good poem of conflicting emotions, we all have them!

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