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Anavrin
By Matthiasrising
18 October 2007
More on self-deprecation and resolution, thus.

Note the title. And the conclusion of the poem. Vanity. Well not really.Cool

Broken and delirious,

Stuck by the needles of the past

Coming to life before you now,

You want to bury the dead?

Starving and diseased,

Wreaking of inner decay,

Leaving pestilent trails around you,

You want to cure the illness?

You want to make this train stop?

You want to rebuild this place?

Pacing and reminiscent,

Digging a quiet trench for yourself,

Tired of trying something new,

Exhausted by self-deprecation,

Wasted and empty and dying,

Settle by the solid wall.

This is your foundation,

Remember it as you take another journey.

These thoughts break down to a pattern;

Your memories will come and go;

Don’t attach so tragically to them.

Quietly, calmly, the vase begins to crumble.

Surely, truly, you are coming home.

Reborn again inside your mind.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 18th October 2007
I noted the title and the conclusion - none the wiser. The vase threw me completely. 
 
A dark feel, made me think of Irvine Welsh for a fleeting moment. Not without effect - but for me, lacking meaning. I'm not the brightest button... 
 
Phil.

Written by fellpony (1652 comments posted) 18th October 2007
not really my understanding of nirvana (not even backwards). There are some good lines, likeDigging a quiet trench for yourself, and Settle by the solid wall , even though I am unsure quite where you're going with them.
Response
Written by Matthiasrising (32 comments posted) 18th October 2007
I apologize for the ambiguity. The vase is the subject. The person going through transformation. Stuck with needles and what not, then going through negative experimentation and finally giving up on life altogether. The solution, at least here, is to just meditate and realize the insignificance of all the trials and tribulations. 
I'm sorry I'm getting preachy. 
No it's not really Nirvana by any convention. 
 
The vase is a metaphor for the person its about. Check the other poems in the TGI13 post I made. It is a metaphor specifically from "Gallery" The vase breaking is symbolic. 
 
Help? 
These were my ideas. Form your own judgments. I appreciate them. Maybe just use the context of the metaphor and other poem to help? 
 
Thanks, guys.

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