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Poetry
First Frost
Written by fellpony
18 October 2007


Gold leaves are cast off by the tree
  in the first frost.
cold morning sunshine tears them free;
they flutter downwards helplessly
to river edges shelved with ice
where scents from earlier sacrifice,
  sharper than frost,
sting the bright air with autumn spice.
The leaves float thick down stream and shoal;
at watersmeet they sink and roll,
  deep as the frost,
into the year-end’s shadowed bowl.
A few brown leaves clutch crisp and curled
where next spring’s catkins, waiting furled,
will dance into a warmer world
  after the frost.

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Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 18th October 2007
As you know, I'm not the most poetically educated - more of an enthusiast. So, you'll probably laugh at this... 
 
I really enjoyed the pulse of this - it also reminded me of Kubla Khan. I think it was this line particularly:  
 
to river edges shelved with ice 
 
that did it. Is that daft - or is there something in it? 
 
Enjoyed this very much. 
 
Phil. 
 
Kubla Khan?
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 18th October 2007
were you thinking of the line where Alph, the sacred river ran 
?? 
 
or the idea of the caves of ice ?? 
 
... other than that, nowt to do with the stately pleasure dome!

Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 18th October 2007
Probably - and probably daft. I reckon it was more the rhythms than anything else. 
 
Still liked it very much. 
 
Phil.

Written by tpowell (105 comments posted) 18th October 2007
Loved this, very beautifully written and captured the scent and colours of Autumn and the promise of another Spring to come. 
 
Tracey

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 19th October 2007
I like the rhythm and rhyme of this. I didn't even notice the rhyme on my first read, which in my mind means that you pulled it off without being heavy-handed.  
The descriptions are detailed and original, and the structure makes me think of the fallen leaves you mention.

Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 19th October 2007
Lovely poem, fellpony, gives the crisp atmosphere of late autumn.

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