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The Infant Class
By audrie
19 October 2007


    This is based on a true story. I was going to put it in the kid's section...but 
    I don't know if they'd 'get' it!

    PS. For those who come late to this, I put Job instead of Lot! Must have been thinking of a Job Lot!!



The infants sat listening their eyes opened wide
To tales of old times and of Love, Hope and Pride.

They were told of the bible and stories it held,
Of Moses, and Jesus, and the sickness he quelled.

Then God said to Lot, 'Take your wife and flee away,
And do not look back or you will rue the day.'

But Lot's wife looked back, she was clearly at fault,
And God turned her into a pillar of salt.

The children were stunned, how could that be?
When a little voice asked, 'What happened to the flea?'

Reviews

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 19th October 2007
I love it. Can i ask did you base the poem around the punch line or did it just jump out at you as you wrote it? 
 
paula
Thanks, punchy,
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 19th October 2007
No, it was a true account from a teacher of infants. I just curled up when I read it, so wanted to put it out for others to enjoy.

Written by tpowell (105 comments posted) 19th October 2007
Brilliant! Out of the mouths of babes as they say, what did the teacher say to the child who was worried about the flea? 
 
On a similar note, when I was little I thought the line 'I am the Lord of the dance said he' was 'I am the lord of the dance-settee', I was very puzzled as to why Jesus had a settee that could dance. 
 
Tracey
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Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 19th October 2007
I , poor atheist that I am , thought that the lady was Lot's wife. 
 
patterjack
Note to the poor atheist
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 20th October 2007
The poor atheist above is correct. It was Lot's wife. It is quite normal for children whose vocabularies are not quite ready for word like "flee" to misunderstood. Before I had learned to know that choir didn't have a "q" I used to sing: "Sweet singing in the chair" in the Holly and the Ivy. Of course it didn't make sense, but none of it did anyway, ha ha. My father used to sing "Sadly my cross eyed bear" because it made more sense than "Sadly, my cross I bear". And how many children have said: "Harold be thy name" because it makes more sense than "Hallowed be thy name"? Well done Audrey - just one small change of name I'm afraid.
Ouch,
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 20th October 2007
slap on the wrist time! Thank you for pointing out my error. I shall be turned into a pillar of salt if I don't take more care! 
 
I love the things children come out with. When I was born, my parents decided to call me Audrey Jean, and my 4 year old sister insister to anyone who asked, that my name was 'Ordinary Green'. After this, she was probably right!
Tracey
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 20th October 2007
I don't know what the teacher's reaction was. It was includeed in the 'What children say' in the Daily Mail a few years ago. 
 
I do have a sense of the ridiculous, so this appealed to me.

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 21st October 2007
LOL... Brilliant!

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 21st October 2007
Funny Audrie. You'd be surprised what kids come out with on an almost daily basis. 
 
There's a children's poem by Arlhberg that explores this - but I can't remember what it's called - or how to spell his name! (It might be, First Day at School) 
 
Phil.

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 21st October 2007
Loved this Audrie. 
Bernie

Written by TurboWolffe (98 comments posted) 21st October 2007
Now, I, as an older sister, know how this works. My brother happens to be young enough to say stupid things, but my sister is just getting there. I remember one day how my sister just all of a sudden said, 'I not talkin' you!' 
Now, it's just over used (Thanks to mom!) ;) 
 
A Bottle of Brandy & a Pint of Irish Beer, 
TW

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 21st October 2007
What a sweet little poem and typical of how kids home in on the minutae and often let the big issue roll over them. 
Perhaps they are right and it is the little things that matter. I wonder when they lose that observational ability? 
I remember my brother' little girl giggling at a sign in a dept store that said Menswear. 
Jane
Thanks
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 21st October 2007
to all. I am glad you all enjoyed it.

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