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Burning Attraction
By Larnyx
21 October 2007

Hey every1, interested enough to look at this poem.
This poem is targeted at teens who can relate to liking someone they dont really know and knowing theyll never get with them. a sorta common topic, and a not so good poem.
cheers
Larnyx Achrabeige

Its as though the Earth is my tomb

In my coffin I lay, every day another nail.

I wait the day to see the man in black

To take me to see the man I hail.

All around I see others fires burn

The passion of their life.

But inside of me I’m extinguished

Left with the ashes of my strife.

My life is great, I know worse.

I have family and friends whom I love.

Yet it seems I’m lonely but never alone,

A black hole amongst the stars above.

The sun into which I stare so willingly,

Don’t know its heat, but I still want to touch

To feel its light amongst my face and body,

But to be burnt is what I fear so much.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 21st October 2007
More some sort of flow of thoughts than an actual poem, but it has some nice lines. Not just teens who sometimes feel like that. :sigh  
Somehow I don't know if I get the last line correctly: The narrator doesn't live life to the full, would want to, but is afraid that life wil hurt him/her? Is that it?

Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 21st October 2007
If you feel like this at the start of your life, it is no wonder that psychiatrists make so much money, ha ha. Get involved in some voluntary work where you work to help others. This is one way of turning a lonely life into a useful one.
To answer some questions
Written by Larnyx (10 comments posted) 21st October 2007
Yer, I only ever write poems, or thought flows,  
(which truthfully is a better word thanks Fledermaus), when I'm sad. Truthfully the poem is more about love and liking people, than life itself. The last linees about the sun, are all about the person i like and the very last liine is about how I'm scared to do anything about it. 
Thanks for the comments, hopefully this clears it all up. 
Cheers 
larnyx

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