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Withered
By maipenrai
22 October 2007
My part seems to have withered
it  no longer performs.

When I was a young man
my part would perform with ease,
no effort required
no tablets either
not when I was a young man.

Sadly those days are gone
for now it will just not perform.
I look at it with
tears in my eyes,
it make's me feel small,
betrayed almost.

Maybe I should chop it of
it's no bloody use no more
a total waste of time,
my left foot
in the Sunday Morning Game.

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Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 22nd October 2007
Ah! I thought it couldn't be - for no matter how useless that might be, I don't think many of us would consider chopping it off. 
 
Count yourself lucky you can still play. (Football that is ;) ) I reckon I may be able to go back to it in about a year. 
 
Enjoyed. 
 
Phil.

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 22nd October 2007
Thanks Phil, My footie playing days are lost in the distant past I'm afraid to say, not bad at Championship Manager, but even here it looks like Stockport are going to give me the chop. :grin :grin :grin  
Bernie

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 22nd October 2007
Heheh... Good one. Perhaps he needs a magic pill after all. Look at what Josie did with them. They're multifunctional ;)

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 23rd October 2007
Thanks Fledermaus. 
Bernie

Written by alandavidpritchard (58 comments posted) 24th October 2007
enjoyed the inverted expectation - clear to see the mirth that you must have felt constructing this 

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 25th October 2007
Thanks Alan, long time no see. 
Bernie

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