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By alandavidpritchard
24 October 2007

fragments, used-stubs, receipts, graffiti, phone-messages, texts and chatroom entries - like clues left behind ... forming an invisible narrative


Jack, 24, very good –looking, XVWE09975-665432 

Passive, obedient, sexy,stunning body, straight-acting, horny 0718 34567
 

Honey Bun – phone me pls – Sweetie pie xxx
 

The barman gives me an erection.

You’re lucky – he won’t even give me change!
 

I like your smile.

7:30 my place
Carl 8452651

 Honey Bun, I need 2 speak 2 u – Sweetie Pie xxx
 

Which one?
 

Dear David. This is really embarrassing, but what the hell. We met last Thursday. I was wearing a green tie…
 

“Someone called Mike called. He’ll try again later.”
 

The blonde one
 

Thanks for the flowers, thaaaanks for the hours ….
 

Honey Bun im pregnant. Call dammit. Sweetie Pie xx
 

That’s me – who are you?

Meet me at the ice-machine 3/08/96
 

Eurodream Hunks =£6

Live strip show. Admit 2

Honey Bun – I know u r out there – pls its urgent – Sweetie Pie

I’m not in right now, so if you’d …

Honey Bun – who on earth is Sweetie Pie? Call me. Mike

(27mUK has entered)

I’m not in right now, so if you’d like to leave a message
I’m not in right now.

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 24th October 2007
Like the previous piece, there's something depressing about this. 'Stickily empty' perhaps. 
 
From your intro, I didn't think would work so well, but it does. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3306 comments posted) 24th October 2007
I would have liked to know which was which. Toilet walls seem to be very inspirational to some people and graffiti is sometimes (in very rare cases) rather funny. 
It does work indeed, for the reason Phil mentioned. It's a bit depressing.

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 25th October 2007
a good write Alan. 
Bernie

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 27th October 2007
I don't know about toilet walls, sounds to me like those hilarious adverts for 'partners'. The sheer vanity of these people amaze me. All very sad.

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