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Poetry
The general
By Fledermaus
25 October 2007
I only just heard of this legend myself... 208 AD, during a war between the kingdoms of Wei and Shu... A general of Shu, named Zhao Yun singlehandedly breaks through a siege by the Wei, carrying in his arms the son of his lord.

Baby-boy pressed against his armored chest
The hero rides towards enemy lines
Tenthousand spears point towards the fighter
Tenthousand swords are drawn, horses mounted
Tenthousand arrows are aimed, skies darken
He raises his shield and rides on, on!
The hope of the dynasty in his arms
Three kingdoms under eternal Heaven
Tears in his eyes, his mistress drowned herself
Better to jump into a deep pit
Than to fall into the enemy's hands
But the heir of Shu is saved, ride on, on!
The soldier fights, while the young prince cries
He soothes the child while he slays his foes
His armor is bloodstained, his blade shines red
As the hero carries the child with him
He rides on to safety, rides on!

Reviews

Written by Phil (6387 comments posted) 25th October 2007
There's the makings of something here, particularly with the 'ride on' refrain. Perhaps an argument here for more rhythm to use that. 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 25th October 2007
Thanks Phil. 
Seems I let rythm slip too much recently (and rhyme has disappeared alltogether) ;)
The General
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 26th October 2007
What a truly remarkable story Fledermaus. I sometimes think that perhaps our destiny has been pre-ordained. But there again, we can suddenly change our lives if we want to, can't we? Very well written, and yes, the rhyming did disappear. Nontheless interesting though.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 26th October 2007
Thanks Josie. 
I saw a clip from a Chinese film about these events. The actors were terrible (they thought they were playing an opera I think), but the story itself was so strong. Imagine it: A single warrior carrying a baby right through the enemy army. 
Of course I had the book it was based on immediately.

Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 27th October 2007
This piece grabs attention. It could have been a cunning plan, gambling that the enemy would not harm a baby or a downright wickedness. Whatever, it worked! Good work, Fledermaus.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 27th October 2007
Thanks Audrie.  
I'm afraid the commanders of Wei would me more than willing to capture or even kill the child. After all, he was the heir of Shu and a future competitor for the power over China (as the kings of Shu claimed to be the rightful heirs of the Han dynasty). 
It seems that if this truly happened it was a rather bold and desperate move.

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