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Poetry
Primal
By Flippy_D
24 March 2005
One irrationality versus another.

The secret is to run.
Footsteps become the dull timpani; develop their own subtleties, ‘til each shuddering footfall
Is a crashing orchestral hit.
It will blossom, daubed in hot mud, burned in peat.
Emerging steaming and thatched;
A whimsy; wistful, wiry Thing.
A wisp of it curls and settles on hair.

They'll take that hair, turn it, thread it through exact needles,
With caution, measure.
Care.
No more than this, dip it in shimmering glass, drip it with mercury,
The old poison, full of malice and muscle.
They'll dress it in white and crown it. Better for knowing?
Hand it a scalpel, and a palm to the face to turn the other cheek.

The beast of tar will run,
Under Jupiter's thunder, feet slapping on the tiles of an empty colosseum.
Lurching down a corridor of white marble and fire,
Shedding muck on the walls.

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Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 15th December 2005
jupiter? not sure about that hun, otherwise i like it. 
 
i get a sense of objective panic, whatever that means. 
 
bye! clo xxx
good stuff..
Written by isobel* (26 comments posted) 3rd September 2006
i think the closing line is very effective. 
i have no real problem with the Jupiter motif, but perhaps 'beneath Jupiter' instead of 'under' might render the line more powerful sounding.....as the imagery very much is 'thunderous' and powerful. 
 
i think this is wonderful writing. 
:) 
 

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