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[war]
By kitten_princess
26 October 2007
Not sure what this is!

But it seemed interesting... to me...

Comments please. The group that I wrote this with didn't know what to make of it, it seemed. :/




Perforation.
Separation.

Degradation.
Generation.

Hesitation.
Presentation.

Hate that nation.

War.

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Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 26th October 2007
I think it counts as poetry :p  
 
Very clear and your title is original. The brackets do draw attention.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 26th October 2007
It's a little like one of those playground chants. Its simplicity hides the ideas each word holds. It does work in terms of introducing those huge ideas to the reader. Might make a good starting point for a philosophy/politics class/discussion. 
 
Sounds like I'm damning this, I'm not. It does occur that the playground nature of the words reflects the playground nature of some of the war mentality that goes on. I was talking to a British army guy last night who has served in both Iraq and Afganistan. The differing approach (according to him) of the British Army and that of the Americans was massive. Not sure which was the more humane, but I can now understand why the Americans suffer and cause more casualties than other forces. 
 
Phil

Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 26th October 2007
Simple yet effective.

Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 26th October 2007
Sorry, perhaps I should have said 'Succinct yet effective', the word simple may be misconstrued and devalue the piece. 
 
All the best, 
Steve.

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