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To children

By Nance

27 October 2007

I’d like you now

To be like stars.

To light and stay

Within all hearts.

To be like bright

And merry Sun,

To make us glad,

To spread some fun.

To do the pretty

Gentle deeds,

To find your ways,

To have the leads.

And first of all

To stay yourselves

Those little, shining,

Kindly elves!

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Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 27th October 2007

Ann - Well, yes, we would really really like them to be like that - but somewhere along the line, by the time they become teenagers things have changed. Perhaps it's to do with HORMONES. With brothers and sisters in particular, the pretty, gentle deeds disappear as soon as mother's back is turned when fighting breaks loose. It must be human nature.

Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 28th October 2007

Thanks for the review, Josie. I guess the lines rather refer to little kids that teenagers.

Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 28th October 2007

"than" teenagers - misprint

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 28th October 2007

I'm not sure children were ever, or are ever like this. Maybe for fleeting moments - but otherwise, they're complex human beings just like the rest of. They just lack the knowledge and judgement that comes with experience.

While your piece is not to my taste, it seems pretty well constructed and I guess will go down very well in some quarters.

Room for all styles.

Phil

Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 28th October 2007

Thanks. I do hope children are not just like the rest of ur. I insist they should have a very particular characteristic, for instance, hearty smiles (which are not often granted by grown-ups), light-hearted disposition and sincere treatment. By all means, not all children - most of them.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 29th October 2007

I thought it was a sweet little poem and for the most part was happy to accept it; apart from the last line.That was a step too far for me. I don't see them as Elves.
I suppose we need to think that way about children or we might not bother to pick them up from the school gates!! :-)

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