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By punchy
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30 October 2007 |
Thought I would lighten up by lowering the tone!
There's a puddle and a poo on the bathroom floor
I nearly slipped over when I walked in the door
I never did a puddle, I never did a poo
I really didn't do it, I promise it's true
A puddle and a poo are you sure it wasn't you
Did you have a little trouble getting to the loo
I never did a puddle, I never did a poo
I really didn't do it I promise its true
But someone did a puddle and someone did a poo
And noone else lives here only me and you
I really didn't do it I would say if it was me
When I really need to go I sit before I pee
But maybe you were caught short, couldn't get to it in time
It really doesn't matter I promise it is fine
I never did a puddle, I never did a poo
I really didn't do it, maybe it was you
For goodness sake I'm 38 I know to use the toilet
If I ever need to go I sit, I never soil it
But maybe being slightly drunk
Forgot what you were doing
I think if I was off my face
I'd know if I was pooing!!!!
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Written by man_in_the_box (13 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | | This is one of those I never expect to find on here. The only thing that kept me reading to the end was the hope of discovering who had made such a mess of the bathroom, but nothing. If you're under 12 then yeah, not bad, otherwise lowbrow man, lowbrow. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | Lowbrow, eh. Well God knows where my brow is then. It must be round my ankles,because I thought this was cheeky and funny. It was also well structured and had it's own rhythm and rhyming pattern which keeps it in my "comfort zone" for poetry. There's a place for scatalogical work, it doesn't all have to be about misery angst and suicide.
Poems are allowed to be funny,aren't they?
Jane |
Written by man_in_the_box (13 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | | Hey, I turn my nose up at over-angsty poems as much as anyone, and of course poems can be funny. The word poo just isn't that funny to me anymore and let's be honest, that's the joke. |
Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | | I thought the offender was going to be a puppy ... maybe you just pushed the idea a touch too far by making both speakers human! |
Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | But who did it in the end? That is still unanswered!
Liked this. It flowed well and had everything a poem needs and more. | Poo is still funny!
Written by punchy (499 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | I'm very pleased my poo poem has been appreciated by some and also pleased it has been read by others.
At 38 I still thoroughly enjoy toilet humour and seeing as this recieved quite a few views I think you all secretly agree.
I could,t finish it because just the thought of posting it on this site gave me the giggles and I couldn't finish but one day soon I shall reveal the culprit. I posted it on the adult section for a response but this according to my children is the best poem I've written and they are a lot more critical than anyone Ive met on this site but then my entire family still finds poo's and farting the funniest thing ever.
I may just have a go at lowering the tone even more now!!!!
Anyone fancy giving me a title and I'll have a stab?
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Written by Phil (6681 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | There's always room for lowering the tone - something I aspire to - on occasion.
It may be low brow, but as Jane says, cheeky and funny.
Phil |
Written by Josie (2777 comments posted) 30th October 2007 | | Well Paula - I've seen worse than this subject on this website. Your poem was funny and it did have rhyme and rhythm - and, after all, a laugh is good for everyone sometimes isn't it? Well done! |
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