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I Passed This Way Before
By Talisker
01 November 2007

I passed this way before

once in an Autumn lullaby

to see the eager fieldfares

strip a frosted hawthorn

and dandy peewits tumble

against a duck-egg sky

 

I came this way before

one lost October morning

to hear the grasses scrunching

beneath my step sublimely

and robins duelling melodies

across a frozen streamlet

 

I wandered once this way

in idle contemplation

to taste the air as sweet

as baby’s sleeping breath

and distant garden bonfires

seasoning the breeze

 

I often walk this golden path

on suchlike diamond mornings

to feel the turn of seasons

the gentle pulse of time

endless and unyielding

within a dome of wonder

 

Oli 01/11/07

Reviews

Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 1st November 2007
The short break has done you good, sir. 
One of those that hit my spot. 
 
All the best and welcome back to this path you've trod before. 
Steve.

Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 1st November 2007
Really lovely, I usually have trouble enjoying non rhyming verse but now I get it!!!
ta failte romhat!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 1st November 2007
Lovely to see you back, Oli. 
 
Slan!

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st November 2007
Hi Oli, really good to see you back, even if it is just fleeting. 
 
You have a knack for giving a mature treatment to what many of us would do a Pam Eyers on. So easy to be trite, but you missed that by miles. Lovely words, lovely piece. 
 
Phil.

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 1st November 2007
A lovely poem, can't add any more. 
Lizzy
Hello Oli
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 1st November 2007
It's nice to have you back. Are you having a break from administering to the sick? I loved this poem, as you would imagine. Walking through the autumn countryside - well, there's nothing better. You brought it to life very well.
Thanks
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 1st November 2007
Steve, punchy, gerry, phil, lizzy, josie! 
 
It is difficult just now to find the time to let poems happen - your positive words are welcome and received meekly and humbly. 
 
This is (for me) about more than an Autumn walk (though that is intrinsic) - glad you saw some merit. 
 
Thanks again, 
 
Oli :)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 2nd November 2007
Nicely put, I find the the unchanging repetition of the seaons comforting. I look at things that were the same on one Autumn walk and see them again next season but through different eyes, as things will have changed for me. I don't know why I find it a comfort as sometimes the change is not always for the better,pehaps it's because nature is there regardless. You may have meant something different but that's what it meant to me but,I suppose,it's OK to have different interpretations.It speaks well of the work 
cheers 
Jane

Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 2nd November 2007
Very nice indeed. :)

Written by fellpony (1720 comments posted) 4th November 2007
great observation as usual Oli. Interesting use of the word "unyielding" - resilient and resistant, challenge and comfort. A nice ambiguity at the end to balance the sweetness of the rest.

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