I passed this way before
once in an Autumn lullaby
to see the eager fieldfares
strip a frosted hawthorn
and dandy peewits tumble
against a duck-egg sky
I came this way before
one lost October morning
to hear the grasses scrunching
beneath my step sublimely
and robins duelling melodies
across a frozen streamlet
I wandered once this way
in idle contemplation
to taste the air as sweet
as baby’s sleeping breath
and distant garden bonfires
seasoning the breeze
I often walk this golden path
on suchlike diamond mornings
to feel the turn of seasons
the gentle pulse of time
endless and unyielding
within a dome of wonder
Oli 01/11/07
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Written by stevetroster (1600 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
The short break has done you good, sir. One of those that hit my spot. All the best and welcome back to this path you've trod before. Steve. |
Written by punchy (535 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
| Really lovely, I usually have trouble enjoying non rhyming verse but now I get it!!! |
ta failte romhat! Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
Lovely to see you back, Oli. Slan! |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
Hi Oli, really good to see you back, even if it is just fleeting. You have a knack for giving a mature treatment to what many of us would do a Pam Eyers on. So easy to be trite, but you missed that by miles. Lovely words, lovely piece. Phil. |
Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
A lovely poem, can't add any more. Lizzy |
Hello Oli Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
| It's nice to have you back. Are you having a break from administering to the sick? I loved this poem, as you would imagine. Walking through the autumn countryside - well, there's nothing better. You brought it to life very well. |
Thanks Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 1st November 2007 |
Steve, punchy, gerry, phil, lizzy, josie! It is difficult just now to find the time to let poems happen - your positive words are welcome and received meekly and humbly. This is (for me) about more than an Autumn walk (though that is intrinsic) - glad you saw some merit. Thanks again, Oli |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 2nd November 2007 |
Nicely put, I find the the unchanging repetition of the seaons comforting. I look at things that were the same on one Autumn walk and see them again next season but through different eyes, as things will have changed for me. I don't know why I find it a comfort as sometimes the change is not always for the better,pehaps it's because nature is there regardless. You may have meant something different but that's what it meant to me but,I suppose,it's OK to have different interpretations.It speaks well of the work cheers Jane |
Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 2nd November 2007 |
Very nice indeed.  |
Written by fellpony (1720 comments posted) 4th November 2007 |
| great observation as usual Oli. Interesting use of the word "unyielding" - resilient and resistant, challenge and comfort. A nice ambiguity at the end to balance the sweetness of the rest. |
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