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Snow White's Queen
By gutterkitty
03 November 2007
I wrote this during my creative writing group. Our theme was clichés.

What woman wouldn’t
send a mirror sailing into smithereens
the day it said she was no longer lovely?
Or develop an obsession
with fruit, now that chocolate
can no longer be savoured,
will always taste of fat and guilt.

A life of apples
and barely-there crackers,
frail as the skin around the eyes.
Enough of those hated squares
to build a castle of hope,
in which to spend the days

wondering how those girls in their mini-skirts
and navels, worn like a badge of youth
never seem to feel the cold.
If the greeting of a complimentary mirror each morning
is enough to keep them warm.

There’s no need to poison apples
when cakes are laced
with something close to arsenic,
when coffee is a sin.
And each morning when asked
the same, decaying question,
the mirror stares back impassively,
and sends her tower broken to the ground.

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Plump is Beautiful
Written by Josie (2823 comments posted) 3rd November 2007
Now, the fact that women with a little weight think themselves ugly is because they've been brainwashed by fashion magazines to think that the starved look is beautiful.. If this were really true, why are so many plump women happily married? Because either their husbands like them to be as they are, but probably because they also have other desirable qualities. Painters of the past, ie Bottecelli's Venus, (supposedly a very beautiful and desirable woman) was well built, and wasn't worrying that she had a large stomach. There has to be a happy medium I guess. Well written.

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 3rd November 2007
I guess you should be congratulated for writing on the theme of cliche without really using one. 
 
Sadly, there's a lot of truth in what you say. (in my small experience of women) 
 
The reference to poisoned apples worked very well and joined it all up. 
 
Phil 
 

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