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By no1butClo
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04 November 2007 |
just a thought
[written in Cloform: 7-8-7-8-2...=/] If nothing has filled the holes
left by every person who came
close to making me complete,
does that mean I'm slowly going
see-through? |
Second thoughts?
Written by patterjack (1314 comments posted) 3rd November 2007 | Or a double-post error ?
Btw-- i am a bad syllable counter , and use lots of elisions-- but I think that unless you elide the second *e * to make it ev'ry there are 9 syllables in that line .
But who cares -- you elide , i'll just slip-slide away .
patterjack |
Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 4th November 2007 | In isolation, it's just a bit of clever word play, but read with a backgroud of other clo work, it reads well. Does that make sense?
Phil. |
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 4th November 2007 | | Good one! Very clever indeed. Gosh, the more I think about all the ambiguities in this one the better it becomes. |
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