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The Eve Of Winter's Reign
By Ghost
08 November 2007

Suffer oh summer skies
In sombre shades of grey
A trail of thunder nimbus
Crescendos across the day

The symphony of dawns chorus
Betrays my expectation
The feathered wings of freedom
Seek refuge in migration

Sweeping carpets of foliage
A fusion of autumnal browns
Branches naked and withered
Bereft of their summer crowns

The sun kissed skins of vanity
Fade beneath thermal attire
The chilly hands of summer's end
Rekindle the old coal fire

The rain of a thousand love songs
Pummel the window pane
The sun retires to slumber
On the eve of winter's reign

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 8th November 2007
I don't usually like poems with "Oh" in them,where you seem to be addressing inanimate objects. It's a clumsy device but this settled into a charming,simply expressed work with some nice images. A bit trite in places but not so's you'd really notice.  
Quite an affective piece 
Jane
Winter's Reign
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 9th November 2007
Yes, you've gone into the next phase of autumn. I've written about the gold on the trees, but you poem has moved on. I liked your phrase "The rain of a thousand love songs pummel the window pane." It was yesterday. It goes well with winter's rain. Don't forget your apostrophes: summer's end (the end of summer) and winter's reign (the reign of winter). Easy to correct. You hnad a good rhyme and rhythm and I liked it. I agree with Jane above.
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Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 9th November 2007
welcome to GW :grin  
 
I've read both this and 'New York' - you've got a really nice knack for description, you create an atmosphere but you don't get carried away as some writers do. Particularly liked "sunkissed skins of vanity". Keep working on this and keep writing, with practice you can only improve on pieces like this 
 
good stuff 
 
clo x 
 

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 9th November 2007
Liked this for its simplicity. Could have been trite, but wasn't - although:The sun retires to slumber sailed a little close to the wind. Some nice descriptions. I too liked The sun-kissed skins of vanity 
 
Phil.

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 14th November 2007
I'm rather late with my comments. Haven't logged on for a while, but having read your latest, I've gone back to read the others. 
I really like your poems, I think they are great. I, too, thought 'the sun-kissed skins of vanity' was inspired.

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