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Soldiers 1914-2007
By maipenrai
11 November 2007
For Remembrance.

Now you can visit the gravesides
in those fields of France
lay down your flowers
on those cold headstones
remember the slain,
the dying, the suffering
the loss and the pain.

It's fine to remember the
"Green Fields of France"
but the words of that song
are but just a memory
of a time long past
when they died for a
Promised Land.

A land that was free
a war to end wars
they died in their millions
those poor working lads
and what was the outcome
for the blood that was spilt,
for God knows what for
for the slaughter
goes on day after day.

They are still dying today
Soldiers not known
to you nor me
the unknown soldier
to most of us,
they have lost arms
they have lost legs
left them behind
in Iraq, Afghanistan.

now they are not heroes
not in any given sense
just working lads
who are maimed and destroyed
for Christ knows what.


I remember the blood
I remember the pain
trying to keep  some
young boy alive,
no shouts of glory
just sad moans of pain
as they cried for their mothers
as they cried for their wives

Reviews
Remember them
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 11th November 2007
Very well said, and I, for one think well about the present time and what is happening - especially as they feel sometimes, so we are told, that they are not appreciated. My poem below doesn't refer to the poppy fields of Flanders. John McCrae's poem does that well. Mine refers to young lives cut short by war and the poppy represents red blood shed and lives taken in their prime - and, as you say, that is today as well as yesterday. We do remember them both dead and those who come back after their terrible ordeals, but it is sad to hear of so many homeless ex-soldiers.

Written by tpowell (105 comments posted) 11th November 2007
Very well written and I agree with the content, too many young lives wasted because of pointless wars. I watched the remembrance service on BBC1 and the sight of those thousands of petals, one for each life lost, was very poignant and said more than a thousand words. 
 
Tracey
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th November 2007
Tracy for your comments 
Josie for your comments. 
Bernie

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 12th November 2007
I suppose you could have gone back further than 1914 but I understand why you chose it with the unimaginable slaughter of that war; ironically called the war to end wars which was followed 20 years later by another.  
I liked the way you concentrated on the soldiers and their plight. War is waged by people who are too old too fight and so these poor buggers have to do it. It's easier to talk numbers than people and I salute your brave effort at showing us the real victims 
Jane
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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th November 2007
Jane for your comments, sometimes I think you have to fight wars, other times well !!!!!! 
 
You know what gets me somewhat angry, 
 
I do not believe that there is one single member of our armed forces whose parents are in goverment or are mp's ,not one. yet these guys are at times very keen to send the children of ordinary folk of to war. 
Bernie

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 12th November 2007
Yep, focusing on individuals gives words more power. 
 
Phil
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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th November 2007
Phil 
Bernie

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 13th November 2007
I think your last four lines say it all. 
A well written poem. 
Lizzy
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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 13th November 2007
Lizzy 
Bernie

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 13th November 2007
Heartrending! I have always opposed wars, they don't seem to solve any problems just throw up many more. 
 
Of course, you can argue that there are times when we have to fight, but we should send the beligerant leaders to fight it out. If Churchill had sat on Hitler and knocked the stuffing out of him, it would have all been over in a short while. 
Yes, idiotic, I know, but let us see Bloody Blair on the battlefield, or one of his sons. Not a chance in Hell!

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 13th November 2007
" I do not know with what weapons World War III will be fought, but World War IV will be fought with sticks and stones." -- Albert Einstein... 
 
Weren't those the "green fields of Flanders" (although they fought in France as well)... Some time ago I was watching the Belgian TV and appearantly they now and then still find lost soldiers from WW I over there.  
I sometimes go on holiday there, and it's so hard to imagine when I ride my bike through such a paradiselike place, that less than a century ago some of the bloodiest battles in world history were fought there. 
 
I think the British have a wonderful way to commemorate the fallen btw. Very different from the Netherlands, where people focus more on the suffering and less on the sacrifice. 
In some way British memorials do seem to provide some comfort and pride, whereas Dutch memorials are simply reminders.
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 14th November 2007
Audrie, Fledermaus. 
Bernie

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