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But It's OK

By maipenrai

12 November 2007

But it's ok darling
I heard my father say,
holding mummy close and
kissing away her tears,
I will be ok darling
I will be safe,
take care of little Rosie
until my return.

Fathers words
as he went away to the war,
He never did return.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 12th November 2007

Well it obviously isn't OK.....I don't mean the poem isn't OK. Its fine. I mean the title isn't.....well it is but it isn't,really. In fact nothing is really OK, despite the title and theme.It's not that I don't like it, it just isn't Ok is it?........... Oh you know what I mean
A fine effort

Jane

thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th November 2007

Jane, understand what you mean, any idea's for a title??
Bernie

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 12th November 2007

Oh dear ,I'm afraid I'm rubbish at titles. The title is fine I just missed the irony of it. I'm a bit irony deficient at the moment but I'm on tablets.
The only one that comes to mind- War makes good men liars -but it's far too long, and rubbish Q E D.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 12th November 2007

Not being awkward, but I like the title. It fits with the easy domestic scene and the contrast in outcome.

Phil

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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th November 2007

Phil, re the title, the way I looked at this, the words or words like them must have been spoken by millions of men going of to the war, through the ages, not just now, a man and his family, nothing changes there through the years

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 13th November 2007

I suppose the title could be 'But it's not OK'

Lovely little poem.

Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 14th November 2007

Audrie.
Bernie

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 23rd November 2007

Sad... So it was, and so it shall always be. From Troy to Iraq... Somehow I had to think of the Illiad and Hector who says goodbye to his wife and son before he gets killed.

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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 24th November 2007

Fledermaus.
Bernie

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