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By Toad
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15 November 2007 |
perhaps the sister poem to my "Mockingbird" post I wonder if you're ready
he'd say
for Miles Davis
for tomatoes on your sandwiches
for 3:00 a.m. fishing trips
for Alfred Hitchcock
It never seemed to me
to be a question of readiness
of age, of maturity
I thought that to be ready in his eyes
I would have to grow backwards
or sideways
Then he started catching me
sneaking up behind me
tapping my shoulder
I told you so, he'd say |
HI Toad
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 14th November 2007 | I reread you Mockingbird poem, so I now remember that it is your Dad you are talking about. I'm not too sure who Miles Davis is - a musician, I would guess.
I really like this. Your relationship seems to have been not without its problems. I expect most children think they will never quite do dit right in their parents' eyes. | hmm
Written by Toad (106 comments posted) 15th November 2007 | Thank you, Jean. Yes, there have been problems, like any parent-child relationship, but both poems, especcially this one, actually intend to reflect positive feelings; learning to appreciate things about him and life that I never thought I would.
I'm glad you liked it. It's always interesting to see how a poem strikes someone, because the "meaning" is fluid, and sometimes unexpected. That's one reason why feedback, however small, is so gratifying.
And... yes, Miles Davis is a jazz composer and musician. The list in that stanza is essentially symbolic anyway.
Thanks,
Toad |
Written by Fledermaus (3490 comments posted) 15th November 2007 | | What's wrong with never growing up? Not sure how this struck me, but I liked it. |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 15th November 2007 | I like this, as much for its reflection of the routines of relationship as anything else.
Nice (as Miles Davis might have said.)
Phil | Almost takes off
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 16th November 2007 | Toad,
I like the "fleshiness" of this piece -- not as in physical nudity but for its naked ideas, concepts of "are you ready for..." all those things we must grow into.
sometimes we don't grow into them, and then we change one way or another. I like Miles Davis, and I like Merle Haggard. I like tomato on my sammiches and I like them with no mayo.....
I do hope you will continue working on this, it almost takes my mind somewhere but not quite. Not sure why, but at the end I am left thinking that I wish it had some deeper idea that I could think about.
It probably does work well for others, and I might just be too dense to get it. Still, good thoughts, captured well.
BW |
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