And while I'm at it, one I wasn't going to post, but what the hell. The pickles refer to something specific from a while ago. This one rhymes!
A poet once said (with his head up his arse):
This versing thing is a bit of a farce.
I write all my stuff without a thought in my head
But the words you write down make me see red.
You can't write, ‘I like it,'
It gives nothing to me.
You can't ask me questions
It's for you to see.
My words are transcendent of meaning and life
And asking me questions will only cause strife.
My lack of communication is so clear to see,
My words, they mean nothing, not even to me.
You can't ask me, ‘Why?'
It's a betrayal of art.
You do it on purpose,
It's not very smart.
Any crit I receive must meet my requirements.
Any other will suffer my protests, quite strident.
It's not that I'm picky, or precious, or sad
It's not that my verse is particularly bad.
It's just that my taste
In reviews are quite fickle,
A little like onions -
You'll get into a pickle.
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Written by punchy (493 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
Nice one  |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
An ’andy piece of verse with which
To shoot the opaque poet down.
Had any takers? Perhaps A Buyer!!
Not one to jus’ leave lyin’ ’round.
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Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
| No flies on you Steve. |
I'm going to pretend for a moment that
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
| Enjoyed this, both the flow and the message. Liked the contrast between the stanzas of longer length and those of shorter length. |
Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
No need to pretend GK.
Thanks for reading and commenting - all of you. |
Hi Phil
Written by jean.day (2257 comments posted) 18th November 2007 |
| Another good ascerbic go at some poets and their dainty ways. I liked the idea that asking Why was a betrayal of art and saying "I like it" wasn't good enough. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 19th November 2007 |
Most people ignore poetry because poetry ignores most people, but if you have the temerity not only to say it but say it in verse then I'm afraid you'll have all the pretentious luvvies here gunning for you.
BTW- there are other forums, Phil, there are other forums.
We've had about 70 poems this month and only 1 comedy post,if you're feeling creative.
Jane |
Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 19th November 2007 |
Good fun. I liked the cutting humour in this.
Cheers,
Ben |
Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 23rd November 2007 |
| Funny how it's mainly the poetry section where such discussions come up again and again. In the prose sections when people don't like eachother's work they usually tell why. |
Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 23rd November 2007 |
I do tell why - gently and honestly - and ask questions in case I've not understood. I guess that's what this one is about...being precious.
Phil. |
Written by Merioneth (79 comments posted) 18th April 2008 |
I'm so hesitant to post anything critical of anyone's work. I feel like the new kid, and if I post any real critique people will look at me and go "oh look at the new girl, too big for her britches, she is!"
I feel like I know who this poem is about. Even if I'm guessing wrong, it would still apply. |
Why hesitate ?
Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 18th April 2008 |
If you know what you want to say -- say it honestly and clearly -- like Phil himself . You are good enough
patterjack |
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