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By Josie
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19 November 2007 |
I heard someone saying on the radio yesterday about the power of forgiveness. It doesn't only heal wounds and make the person who is forgiven feel better, but it is actually really therapeutic to the one who forgives. It is very hard to forgive, I know, but we can all try. The problem is that, as humans, we learn from things, and when you have been hurt, you put up a defence against being hurt the same way again. So inside you lies a wound that is festering and ready to be opened up quickly. It is the same for all human beings. Often, though, the person who has hurt you is the one who cannot say "sorry" and admit that they've done anything wrong.
Far harsher than cold winds that blow
And scatter leaves around your feet
They burn the air and wound the heart
Those words of cruel deceit.
They settle in the inward soul
But do not sleep and will not die
But when you least expect them to
They float before the inward eye.
Cruel words are meant to injure you
To cause you pain and inward stress
And, as with seeds, they soon will grow
And cause you great distress.
‘Tis better that these worthless weeds
Are cut down whilst still in their prime –
Fill the crevices within your heart
With kind words more sublime.
Copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk
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Loved it Josie...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | Mmmm. Sounds like that which I have written about in REMEMBRANCE.
Perhaps we are not a million miles away from eachother as may seem. Mind, shooting people was a touch different; but I can well see where you are coming from. You just have to smile and move on. Well, that's putting it a little too glib. Perhaps best said that there is nothing that cannot be forgiven; given a forgiving heart.
Slan!
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Written by Lizzy (783 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | Well put Josie! Very well chosen words and images.
Lizzy |
Written by punchy (446 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | | Nice one Josie. If only forgiving was easy! |
Written by Phil (6549 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | Like this Josie. Easy to err over into the trite with a subject like this - but you kept it simple and effective.
The rhythm for the last line is slightly different in v2 as compared to the others. I prefer the rhythm of this one. I think it makes the rhyme a little more subtle. Couldn't tell you why though.
Enjoyed.
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Written by Fledermaus (3207 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | Yes, so true, but very hard to live up too. I know I often find it nearly impossible to forgive as I have a rather strong sense of what I consider just or unjust. Yet as a certain saying goes "If you seek revenge, dig two graves"... It's very unhealthy not to forgive.
Good poem. |
Written by Josie (2632 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | | Thank you all for your kind reviews. You are right Phil. I hadn't noticed it but there is an extra "beat" in that line, but it would be difficult to change it. The other lines were 4 and then 3 alternating. Never mind. I've suffered in the past, and it is difficult to give advice, but the advice is the right advice, difficult though it is. As long as you carry the burden of cruel words, they will destroy you. You have to let go for your own sanity. You often think you deserve the words, but in fact often you don't and the one who needs help is the one who hurls cruel words. Amen! I won't be taking up counselling although I believe there's a real need for more people in that field. | serendipity
Written by Toad (100 comments posted) 19th November 2007 | funny, I've recently been pondering a long overdue apology I owe someone. A comment I once made in a classroom... long forgotten by everyone but me, but a haunting memory. I think I'll write an anonymous letter. And I'm not just saying that.
As for your poem, I second Lizzy's review.
Toad | effective words
Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 5th December 2007 | Very well expressed plea for a little thought before engaging the mouth machine, Josie. Sadly sometimes the words are spoken before we consider their effect on the listener and only pride constrains us and prevents us from expressing those little words of contrition - I'm sorry.
A thoughtful and elegant poem.
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