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Muck n Brass
By maipenrai
21 November 2007
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What yer mean! muck n brass
what yer mean!
your only a lad
not as big as yer dad
so don't talk to me of
muck n brass,
now I be telling yer about
muck n brass,
aye, I be telling yer now.

When I was a lad
as big as me dad
we used to get up
before we went abed,
twenty four of us
living in old shoebox and
a bloody big teapot,
used to fight for place in
that bloody teapot,
warm it was, warm.

We worked thirty six hour shifts
with half n hour for
bread n jam n pickled egg,
aye, it was hard down pickling factory
and that's for bloody sure,
upto me neck most times
in that bloody pickling juice I was.

Now ! you, young whipper snapper
yer talk to me of
muck n brass,
aye, well maybe yer's right cause
there were plenty of muck but
not much brass, not for the like's of
Billy Muggins.

Reviews

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 21st November 2007
An' when we got 'ome 'r dad'd thrash us ter sleep wit breadknife. 
 
Nice and lighthearted, lucid, good stuff. 
 
Steve 
:grin

Written by gshelme (152 comments posted) 21st November 2007
I liked this Bernie. It made me smile, echo what Steve said,Nice and lighthearted. 
 
Gill :)
oh, funny!
Written by fellpony (1603 comments posted) 21st November 2007
I could just hear this being done at a poetry reading. I think it would stand another verse or two, or even more, about bringing home coal in your cap, six of you wearing the same boots, or something equally silly. And I'd finish it with the speaker making scathing remarks about the present generation's soft living - something like "half a dozen sticks of rock for breakfast and a bucketfull of WKD to wash it down".
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 21st November 2007
Steve, Gill, Fellpony for your comments. 
 
Fellpony, thanks for suggestion, will have to have a think about that, I think your right. 
Bernie

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