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Worry Wart
By punchy
25 November 2007
Having read my poems to some 9 year olds yesterday this was the alround favourite so I thought I would see what you guys think of it. please be as honest as you wish..
I did post it before for a few hours then changed my mind.



My name is Wart and I worry a lot
I worry my worrying won't ever stop
I worry at home and I worry at school
I worry 'bout crying or looking a fool

I worry outside, I worry bout worms
That they'll get in my pants and leave me with germs
I worry 'bout Mrs Doolally at school
She won't let you go to the toilet at all

I worry that when we play games in P.E.
That everyone else will get picked except me.
In assembly at school when we're doing a play
I worry that no one will know what to say

My name is Wart and I worry a lot
I worry that I will be lost or forgot
I worry at night so I can't get to sleep
But nothing will help, " no not silly sheep"

My mum tells me off says, "you worry to much"
But she doesn't know, she's well out of touch
My tummy gets sore when I think about things
Like flying or dying or insects that sting

I worry my mum will hoover my room
And all of my stuff will get sucked up the broom
I worry that when I am naughty at home
That no one will love me and I'll be alone.

But recently things have been starting to change
It feels really nice, but it feels really strange
When we went to beach and we played with the ball
I had so much fun, didn't worry at all

And after the swim class I started last week
I got into bed and went straight to sleep
When I went round to my friends house to play
We built a huge den, didn't worry all day

So now I have realised the more that I do
And games that I play, the less I feel blue

Miss Kindly at school said, " put up your hands
If your worried about sitting your final exams"
And when I looked left and right down my line
Every ones hand was up, all except mine!

So now that I know that all of my friends
They worry as well but some still pretend
To be brave and not care but I know they do
Cos my name is Wart and I'm just like you!

Reviews
A little tweak
Written by BedtimeStoryteller (100 comments posted) 25th November 2007
I'd say your poem is about 90% right, just needs a little tweak here and there, e.g. 'about' instead of 'bout',and 'She wont let you go to the toilet at all', might sound better as: 'I worry she won't let me go to the loo', plus, how about: 'I got into bed and went straight OFF to sleep', and, any chance of two more lines for verse nine? If not, don't worry. 
 
Ian 
Today is the tomorrow I worried about yesterday. 
 
Ian
Written by punchy (487 comments posted) 25th November 2007
oops
Written by punchy (487 comments posted) 25th November 2007
I'm always doing that! Thanksfor your comments, I agree and will change the things you said, I'm always more worried about the rhythm than the wording but thats the drummer in me I think. And I will also have a go at verse 9. Thanks much appreciated x

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