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How I Yearn to be Loved
By Josie
25 November 2007


This is really intended for children who might be struggling with a problem, but I think adults might find it fun too.





          Everyone knows me – Hello.  Yes, I’m fine
          I’m the blob whose position’s just over your line.
               Hello.  Yes, I’m still here, awaiting some use
                Though I feel so unloved and I suffer abuse.

          Remember me now?  My name starts with an A –,
          But when it comes to friendship, I feel like a stray.
              I yearn for respect, for attention and care –
              Just a mark  on your paper with others to share.

          My name ends with E – does this give you a clue?
          You’ll find me at Jack’s and Peter’s house too.
           I live in boys’ shoes, and love the girls’ phones –
                But I don’t like your doggy and won’t share its bone.

          So hello everyone!  Yes, it’s me yet again. –
            Now, why are you finding my use such a strain?
                 Can’t you think who I am?  Just think of ten letters –
                  With my Protection Society, things should get better.

                        Are you wrestling with the a--------e too?
                        It really does have a Protection Society:

                                    http://www.apostrophe.fsnet.co.uk/ 
   

                         And they explain its use so beautifully. 


                         NOW, IF YOU'RE HAVING PROBLEMS
                         WITH ITS USE, TEST YOURSELF BEFORE 
                          IT'S TOO LATE



 

            Everyone knows me – Hello.  Yes, Im fine
            Im the blob whose positions just over your line.
                  Hello.  Yes, Im still here, awaiting some use
                  But I feel so unloved and I suffer abuse.

            Remember me now?  My name starts with an A –,
            But when it comes to friendship, I feel like a stray.
                I yearn for respect, for attention and care –
                Just a mark  on your paper with others to share.

            My name ends with E – does this give you a clue?
            Youll  find me at Jacks and Peters house too.
                  I live in boys shoes,  and love the girls phones –
                  But I dont like your doggy and wont share its bone.

            So hello everyone!  Yes, its me yet again. –
              Now, why are you finding my use such a strain?
                     Cant you think who I am?  Just think of ten letters –
                    With my Protection Society, things should get better.




Please tell us if you got them all right?  There might be a reward!
Only MIGHT.





Copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk

Reviews
very good
Written by punchy (372 comments posted) 25th November 2007
I like this ITS really clever, WHATS the reward? :?

Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 25th November 2007
Hello Punchy - The reward? that's the question, ha ha. For the woman who may have everything, what can be the reward? If you lived nearer I could give you a cup of tea and mince pie, but did you really get them all right? That's the question.

Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 25th November 2007
Not that difficult with a little effort is it? 
 
I teach this to Years 5 and 6. The majority of them understand. I think that about says it all. 
 
Useful piece Josie. Somewhere on my hard drive, I have a crib sheet. I'll see if I can find it for posting. 
 
Phil
Hi Phil
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 25th November 2007
Hi Phil: I used to go in to listen to the children read at our local Primary School, and when we came to apostrophes they all knew why they were there. The children were 6 years of age. I was quite impressed. Their reading was very good too, and I am sure that there is a big drive on now to teach grammar right from the beginning.
A black art
Written by BedtimeStoryteller (93 comments posted) 30th November 2007
I used to think that punctuation was a black art (I didn’t know your from you’re) but, after taking a closer look, I discovered that it’s really very simple and logical. Though I’d no idea what your poem was about until I read the web-site link. That gave the game away and saved me from having to use my brain at eight in the morning. Though I have one question, teacher: is it, Mr Myers’ hat blew off, or Mr Myers’s hat blew off?

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