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Marsh Dragon
By Fledermaus
25 November 2007
's-Hertogenbosch, 1629... I must admit I know very little about the event, except for what I was told by a tour guide. Still though, a lovely town with a rich history. Perhaps I will some day write something better about it. Main point is that the town was called Marsh Dragon because of it's strategic position on the crossroads of two rivers, in the middle of a marsh, which made it nearly impossible to conquer. As such it was a stronghold for the Catholic Habsburgs in their struggle with the protestant rebels (and mainly the house of Orange).

She listened to the Angelus bell, put down the basket, made the sign of the cross and recited her Ave Maria. As she stroked the beads of her rosary she felt how the wood, once carefully carved and polished, had become raw and sticky.

"... ora pro nobis peccatoribus, nunc et in hora mortis nostrae. Amen."

She sighed as she picked up the basket again and descended the slippery stairs down to the canal. Above her brown traces could be seen against the wall. More than once she had asked the lord of the house to relocate the bog; said that it were his own clothes she had to wash, and that there was hardly any current at this corner. Yet he had told her to do what he paid her for. The rich obviously weren't interested in what went on below them, along the canals and in the tunnels.

If the lord wanted his clothes washed in his own pee, then so it'd be. There were worse things to worry about, especially now that the town was besieged.

The maid put down the basket, took out her master's shirt and plunged in the water.

Was it her imagination, or was the level lower than usually? She looked at the moss sticking to the bricks and saw that apart from the usual lines there was a new one which indicated where the water had been yesterday.

She washed the clothes and carried the basket back to the house. Maarten was waiting for her at the kitchen door. Of course he was...

" Won't you wash my clothes instead?", he asked.

" In the master's pee? With all pleasure, dear. Don't you have duty today?"

" I have been up on the wall all night."

" Is it really as bad as they say?"

" Considering the number of fires I could see in the fields, there must be tens of thousands of them, but I don't think they stand a chance against us. They tried it twice before, didn't they? No Hollander can ever take this city."

" I'm still a bit scared. They may not take us by force, but what if this siege continues? I've heard they already built fortresses and walls."

" It won't. They have built their little camps and strongholds around us, but I think they won't last if the Spanish return. It's said that the king sent forty thousand soldiers to rid us of the heretics."

" Really? Forty thousand?"

" And we have our walls and the rivers. I bet the Hollanders can't even get their cannons through the marshes. Nothing to be afraid of."

" And there's one more thing... You patrolling up on those walls. What if a sniper would shoot you down?"

" Do you think a sniper dares to come that near? He would get stuck in the mud and be shot before he can even load his gun. No sweetheart, there's not the slightest danger. Just a little inconvenience."

The maid nodded and carried the laundry inside. If Maarten said so, it had to be true. He knew a lot more about warfare than she did. Besides he was probably right: The Marsh Dragon had held itself against the Hollanders more than once. The walls were more than fifteen feet high and crossing the swamps with horses and cannons was nearly impossible.

She had forgotten all about the water's low level...

Reviews

Written by Lizzy (828 comments posted) 26th November 2007
Interesting, leaves you wanting to know more, part of a story not a whole. 
I liked the beginning which draws you in. 
I was a bit confused about 'relocating the bog' at first but it was clarified. 
Would be interested to know what happens. 
Lizzy

Written by rui (150 comments posted) 26th November 2007
Quite a lovely little scene. I enjoyed the recurring theme of the master's pee and details of being a servant. 
 
Something about the bits of dialogue at the end, talking about the seige didn't quite feel right to me. I can't quite place my finger on it... perhaps the soldier was a little too well spoken and knew too much for an ordinary guard? 
 
Is this part of a larger work? I hope so!

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 26th November 2007
Thanks Lizzy and Rui. 
I'm not sure if I should or could expand this, for I don't know that much about the taking of 's-Hertogenbosch. 
The drop in the water level is significant, yet I did not know how to explain it without giving away too much. 
 
Ever since I visited 's-Hertogenbosch and took a tour boat, I wanted to use it as a setting for a story: It has a network of canals and tunnels that are mainly below or behind the houses, while the town itself was once one big fortress. 

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 26th November 2007
Enjoyed this Fledermaus - one of your better pieces. I too noticed something about the dialogue towards the end, but it seemed more to me like he was talking to the 'little woman' as if it was all a bit complicated. 
 
Phil

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 26th November 2007
Thanks Phil. Really? I am surprised by the positive reactions, for I wasn't sure wether it worked, especially since indeed the end seems to be missing...
I wanted more!
Written by ianhobsonuk (180 comments posted) 28th November 2007
A town besieged – my kind of story – plus I like a story that focuses on an individual, or circumstance, usually overlooked in longer stories/books. 
 
Part 1: Well written, but a few typos: lower than usually (usual)? Also, …one which indicated… sometimes ‘that’ works better than ‘which’. …they (missing have) already built… Part 2: …worn off rosary … (odd word choice). …to know (missing of) the violence… … encrouched (encroached?) 
 
Each part is very short – I would have combined them and included much more of what is to follow - I wanted more! (That’s more complement than criticism) 
 
(For an excellent siege story, read Harlequin by Bernard Cornwell.) 

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 28th November 2007
Thanks Ian. 
I'll check the typos and style thingies you mention. The main problem is that I often write things during breaks, or while I should be doing other things. Especially part two was rather hurried, so any suggestion about how to improve it is very welcome :) 
 
Thanks!

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