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Poetry
Epicurus
By Flippy_D
24 March 2005
His head swirled in fogged haze mauve clouds opium drizzle
Snuffing in the darkness
Dribble
Dribble
Candle, burning, burbling against velvet
Tassles carpet deep soft dust.

The strain of a dizzy sitar creeps over flesh,
Sweating bulks swaddled in tresses,
And nerveless hands with damp palms,
Propped on the arms of low, stained chairs.

Ecstasy oh ecstasy i tried so long to find you i wanted so so
Please me oh sky-antlers trussed with red stars
Daubed in giddy blood
Induct me into hedonism please oh please oh yes.

Breasts bared in the shadows
Behind curtains,
Insensibility and gold,
Drooling
Drooling
Fumbling,
Bubble
Bubble
As the smoke claws at the walls.

He murmurs.

Ohyesohyesohyes...

Reviews
delicious
Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 30th June 2005
deliciously sensual and wonderfully evocative - enticing even - and what an ending! 
Quite an enthralling poem ...the oh-so-lovely descent into the arms of pleasure is expertly conveyed
you're far too good at this...
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 16th October 2006
I like the air of imperfection, it's not a meeting of two beautiful beings [excuse my fairytale approach].  
 
Conjours images of the ancients, Romans or greeks, togas and pomp and circumstance. Perhaps unknowingly you've summed up their attitude to sex quite well really. :p  
 
so sensual, and once again I'm jealous :) 
 
x
oh dear...
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 15th April 2007
BUT the ending reminds me of terry pretchet :x

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