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By jillrabbit
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27 November 2007 |
Inspired by an old spit 'n sawdust pub in Sunderland, sadly long gone. Oh, the sights you could see in there...
Londonderry Air
Through the double doors
Into the musty atmosphere
Old people's lives played out
By a roaring fire, a beery haze
Absorbed into the fabric of the rooms
Creating an age-old pattern
Ground in by thousands of feet.
Lonely souls leave their mark in the dust
Drifting into the gloomy corners,
Rabbits in a warren,
Huddling together for moral support.
If they move, their shadows will remain.
Stained faces and stained lives,
Stained teeth smiling
Lips pulled back, hypnotised
By the swirl of the tobacco
Dancing in the Londonderry air.
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You're 'avin a larf!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 27th November 2007 | Londonderry Air !?? I'm sorry I'm Irish and I don't get the connection??
Rhythm, rhyme, nor content?? Fails on all counts?
Londonderry Air?? Scarborough Fair more like.
Slan! |
Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 27th November 2007 | "Lonely souls leave their mark in the dust
Huddling together for moral support.
If they move, their shadows will remain."
This should make perfect sense to you, Gerald.
| Rythm, rhyme, nor content?? Fails on al
Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 27th November 2007 | Hello Gerald
Sorry that you misunderstood the point of my last contribution. My fault, I think. Should have made this more clear in my introduction to it.
It makes no reference to Londonderry, in the north of Ireland. It's the name of the pub.
Or, have I got it completely wrong and you just didn't like it?
Regards
Jillrabbit |
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 27th November 2007 | | Now that I know what it's about I can say it has a great atmosphere... Not a very smart name for a pub though I think: Naming it after that town imediately excludes one half of the potential customers, or perhaps they could have named it "(London)(d/D)erry -- The politically correct pub; Choose for yourselves". | hi
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 28th November 2007 | hi a good write which i enjoyed, nothing in this that is hard to understand, you said it was a pub in your intro.
nothing wrong in naming a pub after a "SONG! IS THERE??? | Gawd.....!
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 28th November 2007 | Wrong Jill. I enjoyed the poem very much. I simply just didn't get the connection.
Hilarious contribution from Fledermaus! He wants locking up!! Mad Dutchman!! Seriously he needs locking up!
Again. I am sorrry if I didn't twig. But it was a bit obtuse.... Just a bit obtuse...? Don't you think? Just a teeny weeny bit obtuse?? Just a teeny weeny bit...
Slan!
PS Bernie: Grow up and act your age! [ Only joking ]. I can forgive a Manchester United Supporter ANYTHING! Just ANYTHING! ...ANYTHING... |
Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 28th November 2007 | Mm...
“Rhythm, rhyme, nor content?? Fails on all counts?”
“I enjoyed the poem very much. I simply just didn't get the connection.”
Back peddling furiously there, Geraldine…………!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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