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Poetry
Separation
By jillrabbit
28 November 2007

Love, eh?




Once I used to go at night
To where you lay in dreamless sleep
Down I'd bend to smooth your forehead
The love so strong it made me weep

Now I have to lie in darkness
Hugging memories. In my head
I'm touching, stroking, kissing you
In an imaginary bed

Separation was not easy,
Losing you was never planned.
I miss, so much, that nightly ritual
Touching you with tender hands.

All those days, your moody ways
All the times we fought and cried.
Then the smiles, laughter, sleepy perfection...
Now? A well of pain inside.

Reviews
you made me cry!
Written by punchy (504 comments posted) 28th November 2007
Oh my god that was so very sad, but I think I was relating it to a child and not a partner and I presume it was the latter? It could be taken either way, the routine and love so strong makes me think of babies but the title and the last verse makes me think partner, either way it was very open and moving. Nice one :cry

Written by tpowell (105 comments posted) 28th November 2007
Another beautiful poem, the image of someone lying sleepless in their empty bed is very strong, very sad. 
 
Tracey
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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 29th November 2007
a lovely sad write

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