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Poetry
At the Therapists.
By ZainaZahir
29 November 2007
My last visit to the therapist gave me things to think about.

The therapist wears a white dress,
As she sits in her white room,
She writes my details on white paper
To diagnose, a cure presume.

I must be examined,
She wants to look inside.
I remove my gloves, my veil,
And all the things that hide
Beneath my niquab spill out
A pus filled, rancid tide.
I tell her of my marriage
How I have asked for more
And better, but he won't talk
Last week he was with a whore
 
And how I love another.
 
She lays rose quartz on my abdomen
Yarrow on my heart,
Soft colours play, she tells me to
Imagine light in every body part.
Crab apple and oak in a bottle
Take small sips throughout the day
 
She says
 
But branches always grow until
The root is cut away

Reviews

Written by punchy (493 comments posted) 29th November 2007
Enjoyed, lost the rhythm of the rhyme after line 8, was hoping it would continue as first 8 lines but I am a bit of a sucker for eveness. I love the gloves and veil and all the thing that hide and the last 2 lines also. :grin
Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 29th November 2007
a interesting and I think good write.
Hello Zaina
Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 29th November 2007
and welcome to Great Writing. How simply but well your poem puts over your case. White is the colour of purity, a clean colour. Brides wear white. White used to be the symbol of purity - but white often hides things which are hidden below that are crying to be revealed. It is good to bring these things into the open because in order to rid oneself of problems, they need to be dealt with and not kept concealed beneath white veils. How well you put this.
Hi
Written by ZainaZahir (1 comments posted) 29th November 2007
:grin  
 
Thanks for your comments, everyone. 
 
Punchy, I put those lines together so it would emphasise they were the same subject. But your idea of everything mirroring would have been so much better. 
 
I do not feel inclined to revise but I will bear it in mind for the future. 
 
Respect...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 29th November 2007
What a wonderful -- and delicate-- piece of writing!  
 
My fondest compliments to you. I can say no more. 
 
Slan!

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 29th November 2007
Effective, as this was a somewhat uncomfortable read. Good stuff. 
 
Phil

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