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Thanks to all who gave me reviews and I hope this version is what you were all looking for. The retirement home called us at eight in the morning. “Dorothy has taken a turn for the worst. I am afraid she might not last the day.”
So we rushed over there and tried to make my grandmother as comfortable as possible. I talked of the past hoping she could hear me. I told her how much she meant to me and how glad I was to have gotten the chance to know her. She was unresponsive and her breathing was irregular.
As I was going to get my sixth cup of coffee my wife called me back. “She woke up” my wife said excitedly. Grandma was propped up in bed and her eyes were clear and sharp. My eyes misted as I thought of how long it had been since I had seen recognition in those blue eyes. I gently hugged her and sat in the chair next to her bed. She touched my face and her eyes slowly closed. Then she was gone.
My wife and I stood in the hallway and cried on each others shoulder for a few minutes. As I wiped the tears from my eyes I began to realize what my grandma had said. We never had talked of heaven nor hell so I guess I was a little surprised she believed in reincarnation. I had never really put much thought in it. As my wife went to call the rest of the family I leaned against the wall and looked to the ceiling. Someone talking softly interrupted my thinking. Two of the nursing assistants were walking by and one of them gave me a sympathetic look. For some reason my mind froze and I stared. I had been here a few times before but I had never seen her before. But it felt like I knew her intimately. She was a tall brunette, with blue eyes, whose long hair was put in a bun. Her name tag had Gracie on it.
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Suddenly I am standing next to a wagon outside of a small town. I stagger from the disorientation and I feel someone grab my arm. I turn and there stands Gracie. She is in a simple dress with her hair down blowing in a slight breeze. I am wearing what looks like homemade clothes that are uncomfortable. My mind can not seem to comprehend what is going on. There is Gracie and I am next to her that is all I think of. “Promise me you will come back to me soon Samuel. After you strike it rich come back home so we can make a family.” She pleaded with her eyes and her words. I wondered why this fool would leave her to try for some gold. We hugged and I leaned torwards her for a kiss….
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I am back at the home and in my heart I feel disappointment along with confusion on what had just happened. I have to get out of here. I try to take a step and my leg gives away. And I …..
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After a second of disorientation I realize I am now outside and in the breeze I smell jasmine. I shake my head and look around. I am standing outside what looks like a plantation some where in the South. I realize I am wearing a rebel officers uniform from the Civil War. A door slams behind me and I turn and find Gracie coming torwards me. She is no longer wearing scrubs but seems to be in a tight bodice with a hoop skirt. My mind reels and I wonder if I have gone insane. “William I am so glad to see you before you go off to join your regiment.” I automatically want to say ‘Frankly my dear Scarlet I don’t give a damn’ but I resist. This seems so real but yet how can it be? She steps closer and I touch her face and then we softly kiss….
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Now I am lying on the ground looking up into my wife’s worried face. The words coming from her mouth are not making any sense to me. “When I came back from the phone I found him lying here like this.” Then I see Gracie’s face as she leans over me.
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The disorientation is not as bad this time. It is night time and I am standing out side a building with a big sign that has something about a USO dance on it. Again I am in uniform except this time it is a WWII lieutenants khaki uniform and the garrison cap is in my hands. “Come on Johnny let’s find this dark haired angel of yours.” I turn quickly and standing next to me is another lieutenant whose arm is around a blonde haired girl. They hurriedly go into the building and as they open the door I hear big band music coming from inside. I stuff the garrison cap into my back pocket and go through the door. The music is loud and there are many people dancing. Not a single guy in the place is out of uniform. My eyes roam and sure enough there is Gracie again. She is standing next to a stodgy looking woman who I guess is one of the chaperones. Gracie spots me as I am heading torwards her and a smile lights her face that makes my heart ache. She handed her drink to the chaperone who gave me a look of contempt. I put my hand out and Gracie grabbed it and we spun onto the dance floor. I never knew I could dance but with her everything seemed easier if that makes any sense. We danced for what seemed like hours then finally the last song was a slow one and she danced with her head on my shoulder. I looked into her eyes and she into mine. “Johnny, I think I am in love with……”
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Damn this is getting on my nerves. Now I am standing with my back to the wall at the retirement home. My wife is telling everyone I am okay and that it was just emotional shock. “I just want to go home” I say weakly. Although I don’t really want to leave I want to go find Gracie with all my heart. “Okay dear. Let’s go home.” My wife put her arm around me and we began to walk down the hall.
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This time I am leaning against a VW van. I am in a ragged looking t-shirt and bell bottoms and I seem to have long hair. Gracie is sitting beside me she is wearing bell bottoms also and a shirt with large sleeves. “I can’t go with you to Canada, Steve; I have my family and school.” To me she sounded on the verge of tears. And what was with Canada? Am I trying to skip out on the draft? I put my arm around Gracie and she began to cry. “I don’t want to have to say goodbye.” I say with a wrench to my heart. She looks at me with her blue eyes. “Then don’t. Stay here with me” she pleads. “Gracie, I wish I……….
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I am leaning on the drivers side of my car facing the retirement home. My wife is getting into the passenger side of the car. “Are you sure your okay to drive?’ “Yeah’, I say, ‘I am fine.” I go to get in to the car and I change my mind. “I forgot something I will be right back.” I ran back in searching for Gracie. My mind was reeling. What am I doing? What am I supposed to say to her? Hi Gracie I am your long lost soul mate. Ha! I am insane. As I come around a corner I literally run into her. “I’m sorry” I sputter. She says it’s okay as I help her off the floor. “Gracie I just wanted to say……” I stop and try to think of what I should do. “Yes” Gracie says with a quizzical look. “I…I wanted to thank you for taking care of my grandmother so well.” And I walked away.
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