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Poetry
Crossroads
By Matthiasrising
01 December 2007
Grandma meddling is fairy godmother. She plays a special part here: the badgering voice of fate and the personification of sorting out memories.

Disney inspires me every day. Seriously.

Spoiling old verses to mend my own,

I’m making new friends and keeping the old:

Elements of silver some less like gold.

These are puzzle pieces

For a jigsaw of fate-fashioned form.

Slowly I’m moving to a different plane.

But each night I’m still haunted

By that blue ghost across the mirror.

These dreams are recurrent fractals

Confusing geometry halting inner reason.

Fairy tale goddess

Meet me in my sleep;

Force feed me those loving memories,

And hold me while I weep.

Like dropping a baby in the crossfire,

You abandoned me to the war.

To survive the bullets,

I gripped the bounds of my schism,

Turning it all inside out.

 

I just blame everyone for these things.

It’s not that I really think you did this,

More like I made you,

Just like I made myself.

Self-perpetuated fault line,

Won’t you sing to me

The song of iron and energy

Welling up inside?

 

12:00 magic midnight.

Blazing through these pages,

Of ancient mechanic light

Turning inside me now.

I wish I could see it though;

Watching moving pictures with no eyes.

Grip this moment.

Stabilize my arrogant insecurity.

Bring back Grandma Meddling-

Corporate child story,

Wreaking havoc with my mind.

Maybe I need this.

Maybe you can take me home.

Reviews

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 1st December 2007
Some parts of this i really like. The imagery is strong and evocative. The opening two lines especially so. One or two lines less accessible but on the whole it created a good picture for me.

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 1st December 2007
Some parts of this i really like. The imagery is strong and evocative. The opening two lines especially so. One or two lines less accessible but on the whole it created a good picture for me.

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