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Drama Scripts
The Angels with Dirty Faces
By Josie
01 December 2007



Trying my hand at writing a very small drama for the first time in my life.  Be patient but kind. 

My goodness, how I've struggled with the formatting.  Can anyone give advice on the drama section?  I cannot change this below no matter how hard I've tried.  Please forgive and help.





THE ANGELS WITH DIRTY FACES 


By Josie

Scene I – A Bradford Street  


First Person:             “So, these angels with the dirty faces as you call them.  Where do they live?  Are they really angels?  They can’t be.  Angels wear white and have wings and what-you-call-thems round their heads!”

 

Second Person:         “Come, I’ll take you to meet them.”

 

First Person:              “Get along with you, stop pulling my leg.  You can’t really see angels.  They’re only in the minds of silly people.  Come on now.  Get real.”

 

Second Person:         “Be prepared for a shock.  They are right here in the centre of Bradford.  They’re working angels.”

 

First Person:              “In the middle of Bradford?  Working? Ha!!!  Angels are surely purer than pure and they float round in Heaven don’t they doing nothing but fly and sing?   Whatever sort of angel would come to BRADFORD of all places?   Oh, well, go on then, if you’re sure.  I’ll come, just for the laugh, but we must surely find them at the cathedral?”

 

Second Person:         “Well, not quite, but they are to be found in the Crypt of St George’s Church, and be prepared for a surprise.  It says in the Bible that we must “be not forgetful to entertain strangers, for thereby some have entertained angels unaware.”  (Hebrews 13:2).  Also, Jesus was most likely to be found with the down and outs, the prostitutes and the outcasts of society, not with the rich.  He blessed the poor in heart and said that a rich man was about as likely to get into Heaven as a camel could get through the eye of a needle.  So it makes sense that His angels will be here with those sorts of people."

 

First Person:              “But  I would never have imagined that angels would want to associate with the down and outs, the drug addicts, the people who have got themselves into a mess in life because they can’t leave drink alone would they?  Surely they have other things to do in Heaven haven’t they?

 

Second Person:         “You can find angels working on this earth if you have eyes to see them.”




 
                              Scene II – St George’s Crypt, Bradford 

Second Person         “Here we are.  I told you we’d get a warm
                                     welcome here.  Now, here's a face I recognize.
                                     This is Brian, one of the angels with dirty faces.
                                     Come on Brian, tell us your story.  How did     
                                     you become an angel?"
 

Brian                           “I wouldn’t exactly describe myself as an angel, but I do my best because I want to help others in the way that I was helped.  My word, was I down -  so down I thought I’d never get up again.   My problem was drink.  I started at the age of 17 and how I wish I hadn’t.  I realized I wanted to drink more than anybody else.  Just thought it was “big” and I wanted to be one of the boys.  What a fool!  I lost everything in life – my home, my job, everything. “


First Person               “So what happened?”  

Brian                           “You can’t stop drinking overnight.  No, no.  You get this dreadful craving.  I only had to pass a pub and smell beer and I’d be off again.  I was told by someone on the street that I could get a meal here and perhaps a bed, and I thought ‘Well it must be better than this cold wet street. ‘  I felt like a social outcast I can tell you, but nobody here made me feel like that.  I was met with open arms and that’s the truth of it.  But you’ll meet a rum lot here and that’s for certain:  assylum seekers, down and outs, drug addicts, drinkers like I was, schizophrenics – you just name it.  All here.” 


Second Person          “What was the turning point for you, Brian?"


 
Brian                          “Oh, no doubt about it, it was when I became a Christian.  I suddenly realized that someone loved me, despite all my faults.  Of course, I still was tempted to the drink at first.  Pass a pub, and I couldn’t resist it, but I’ve fought a long hard battle to be here today.  Now I can happily go into a nice country pub and order a lemonade.”
                                    

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  Brian is one of many many people that St George’s Crypt have helped, and this weekend, we, at our church will take shoeboxes filled with food:  sugar; lentils; dried beans, rice and anything else that we can spare, to feed people like Brian who have hit rock bottom in life.  It’s easy to think it could never happen to you, but it could.  Down and outs often start at the top before they hit the bottom.  Yes, this is where the angels work and this is a Christian church putting Christ’s teachings into the world in which we live.  Whilst you are sitting with the family, in the warmth of your living room this Christmas, well fed and loved, please remember Brian and his friends in Bradford, and the angels who are giving up their time to be with them.  Please see my article on the non fiction side of the website soon.     

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 1st December 2007
Yes. They are amongst us... The word 'angel', especially in English always triggers good memories of someone I once called so. :sigh  
 
Hello Fledermaus
Written by Josie (2500 comments posted) 1st December 2007
I can't even hide on the "drama" side from you. ha ha. Yes, they are certainly amongst us, and we only hear of the bad things which people do, the angels seem to be overlooked sometimes, but I have met them in my lifetime, and one was a 6 year old little girl. Very much an angel in my life (but she's 9 now). I do hope you meet your "angel" in life. There is always more than one. I wish some of the others on the drama side could help me with regard to the formatting above.

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 1st December 2007
I find this hard to review because of its overt Christian message. I'm not going to criticise it for that - just leave well alone. 
 
As far as formatting the thing goes, on GW, I think it's a case of huge amounts of patience and a little swearing! 
 
Phil
HI Josie
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
I liked the message behind this - but it doesn't have to be labelled a Christian story. The principals being used are certainly Christian - but they are also part of lots of other relgions - and just part of the philosophy of a lot of people with no religion at all. 
 
I too am a Christian - and I am very pleased to hear that the angels are hard at work at St. Georges.

Written by Josie (2500 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
What a difference is the attitude of people like these angels to many people. Christ told people to forgive and forget and to help the poor and weak - and this is exactly what they are doing, but many others do it also who are not Christians. God bless them all I say.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3141 comments posted) 3rd December 2007
The problems with script format is something the site has not got to grips with, I'm afraid. Anything long or complicated just does not paste up well. The best thing to do is copy and paste into notepad and then copy and paste onto the site, even then you have to do a lot of "on site" editing. It's really tedious and is probably the reason there are so few scipts!! The site just does not favour them. 
I wondered why the people talking didn't have names,or character or any hint as to who they were. I'm guessing they were just ciphers to tell us about Brian and St Georges and allow Brian to speak in the time honoured way of public service broadcasting. As such it was very succinct and effective. As a script,I think it might have better if the information in the last paragraph had been spoken by a third party, a worker or clergyman, perhaps 
Jane

Written by Levi (31 comments posted) 4th December 2007
This reads like a slightly wordier version of the plays the youth group I once attended used to give to the congregation. My two cents script-wise: reduce the dialogue and combine the two scenes into a walk-on part for Brian. And give the poor characters names. It doesn't matter what they are, but featured characters NEED names unless there's some subversive or specific reason why they don't - and even then it's hard to justify. The blurb at the end could also be placed in the body of the script as an address to the audience, as I can imagine any youth group would perform it in such a way.  
 
Apart from that... a very warming Christian message.

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