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Poetry
ghosts
By wt
01 December 2007
In shadows through reflections in a window on a bus
I watch you struggling to keep your balance
As the driver makes a sharp stop
And you nearly stumble onto the pram left haphazardly parked
As you step off slowly to disappear pacing
Overrun by the forward motion of the crowd
You are no longer
But rather have become
Abruptly
A thing that never was
But now instilled as a memory of what could have been
Had we touched and smiled and maybe kissed
As yet another shadow through reflections in a window on a bus
I carry through the city
My secret lovers on journeys
My destination
Memories that never were

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Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 1st December 2007
Having been watching people in the bus? Ah yes... Fantasies. Usually naught but a quick exchange of looks, but it's especially nice because it's so innocent. 
A clear piece :grin

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 1st December 2007
a good write

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 1st December 2007
There's a passage in Zen and the art of Motorcycle Maintenance that goes something like: We pass unnoticed through other people's lives. 
 
Liked this very much wt. Reflective and tender.  
 
Phil

Written by wt (137 comments posted) 1st December 2007
Thanks for that gentlemen 
There's hope for me yet ;)
Enjoyed
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
Very dreamy. I do like a fantasy it's good for the sole x

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