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Sunday Sermon From Somewhere in Britain
By wt
02 December 2007
The summer has gone in a day and half
Of the silence echoing in the valley beyond
Green pastures and the rolling hills of England
A solemnly held memorial for a son of a regiment
Last photograph held to her bosom innocent
But for flying the Union Jack

Run boy run and find new wings to carry you
Now martyr in a cause as high above
The migrating birds in search of warmer clients
As he himself had departed
How quiet all else is but for the odd coo of a bird too high to
Salute as mothers and widows lay flowers
In a lonely cemetery far from where he had fallen
Like his brothers scattered and forgotten
Across shires and moors in villages unheard of
And so on and so forth
And on and on and on

Run boy run and find new wings to carry you
Now martyr in a cause as high above moon
At noon greets their sorrow with open arms
On a Sunday when the autumn scents of the earth
Drew them to find solace from the city
To reassure their departed that they were fairing well

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Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
I see a big improvement in your poetry with this poem. Iat actually conveys images to me at last. It touches the soul in its imagery. Two things I would disagree with you are: 1/ I don't think we view soldiers killed in battle as martyrs (but others may disagree); 2/ I don't think they are scattered and forgotten. People remember them for generations, or if they don't it is the fault of the families not to mention them to the next generation. Why do you call this a Sunday Sermon?
Josie
Written by wt (137 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
Hi Josie 
 
Thanks for your heartfelt review.  
 
If you noticed in this poem the soldier is a martyr "in" a cause vs "for" in the Lebanon version. This is to accentuate the nature of the war in which he faught as well as to relay the feeling that to his brothers in arms as well as to his family he is indeed a martyr. (else his death has little meaning) 
 
If you look at how we are treating our soldiers and veterans here in the UK, I am sure that many feel that they and those who have died in these recent wars have indeed been forgotten by the country as a whole.  
 
Sunday Sermon  
to reflect that the "sermon" of these mothers symbolising the Virgin Mary witnessing her son's crucifixon would be more worthy than that of any priest or sheik or rabbi...  
 
Best 
wt 
 
Ps would be curious to know how you felt about the Lebanon scene 
 

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
Two powerful poems, wt. Very thought provoking. 
 
All war is futile; innocent people die; people sacrifice themselves because they believe their cause is 'just'.  
 
Do we ever fight our own wars as individuals or are we persuaded, collectively, that it's our war? All wars hold the promise of peace at the end, but look at our recent history! People have died generation after generation to maintain our so called freedom. We are now less 'free' than ever, which makes their death seem pretty pointless.  
 
The fallen soldiers are not remembered as individuals by most of us but as a statistic. Where is the honour and glory in that? 
 
Millions died in WWII to rid Europe from a totalitarian state but soon we might wake up one morning and find ourselves living in one, despite the sacrifices.  
 

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
Two powerful poems, wt. Very thought provoking. 
 
All war is futile; innocent people die; people sacrifice themselves because they believe their cause is 'just'.  
 
Do we ever fight our own wars as individuals or are we persuaded, collectively, that it's our war? All wars hold the promise of peace at the end, but look at our recent history! People have died generation after generation to maintain our so called freedom. We are now less 'free' than ever, which makes their death seem pretty pointless.  
 
The fallen soldiers are not remembered as individuals by most of us but as a statistic. Where is the honour and glory in that? 
 
Millions died in WWII to rid Europe from a totalitarian state but soon we might wake up one morning and find ourselves living in one, despite the sacrifices.  
 

Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 2nd December 2007
The British have a way to commemorate the the fallen in such an effective way. Of course they remember them here too, but I'll never forget walking on Edinburgh's Royal Mile with my (then) girlfriend and suddenly realizing the people were silent. They were not disturbed that we had ignorantly chattered on, but the silence went right through the heart and we did just as the Scottish, silently thinking about the Scottish who gave their lives that we could live in freedom. After two minutes the bagpipes resounded against the buildings and the military band marched on past the poppies. 
 
Similarly I was incredibly impressed by the rock the Nowegian resistance gave to that city, and the names of those who had "Fallen in defense of the Empire" on the walls of one of the churches. 
 
Dutch memorial services often focus on the suffering and the 'never again' message, which is a good and strong one, but somehow the British emphasis on sacrifice seems to spread a more hopeful message: Those boys did not die for nothing. 

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