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By amoryblaine
02 December 2007
Great is the amusement ,great is the fun
When two hearts meet, and why is this?
As light as feather in a calm,cool breeze
Dazzled,dazed,in love  till the last parting kiss.
Souls search and scurry and touch
Cry and laugh and blush and wither
Dream and think and wish as much
That maybe some moment they'll sight their lover!

A mirrored image at the 'Drinking Fish'
Men and women and their drinks
The Bartender plays God  and  grants them their wish
Eyes still scanning while glasses melancholically clink!
Don't they see that they weep,they're on fire?
The cigarette smoke signal's too
Not an ear hears the crier
For everone's feeling a liitle too blue.






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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 4th December 2007
Thought the 'fish' 'wish' rhyme a little forced. The first stanza was ok but didn't really grab me. The last four lines however I really liked. I reckon that's worth developing more... 
 
Elli

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