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Drama Scripts
KILLING AMY (10 min Black Comedy)
By Levi
04 December 2007
Hey!

Just a brief introduction: this is the first draft 10-minute black comedy screenplay, the premise for which I originally wanted to flesh out into a feature, but simply couldn't keep the joke going - or find enough story - to warrent any more than a short script.

Thanks guys; hope you enjoy reading.  

Jon

INT. LOUNGE. APARTMENT. DAY

The apartment is sparse, wealthy and modern. The massive plasma screen plays a tacky gossip-style program on ‘it’ girl AMY HUNTER (23):

Still photos are displayed, contorted and zoomed. Snippets of interviews and photo shoots are interspersed with comments from z-list celebs and tabloid editors. The sound is very low.

ALEX (23), a jaded media yuppie, is slouched on the leather sofa in a suit, his feet on the glass coffee table.

GEORGE (25) enters carrying a coffee and casually dressed.

                             GEORGE
                Why’re you watching this crap? 

                             ALEX
                Research. I’ve gotta date tonight.

                             GEORGE
                             (laughing)
                You’re seeing Amy Hunter? 
                (his smile falls) Seriously? How?

                             ALEX
                I owe her housemate a favour. I said
                I’d keep the soulless, vacuous idiot
                occupied for the evening. 

                             PRESENTER
                             (ON TV)
                How’re you enjoying Paris?

                             AMY
                             (ON TV)
                Oh, I love Paris! She’s a great singer.  

ALEX sighs, grabs his keys from the coffee table and skulks out.


INT. BATHROOM. SPRUCE APARTMENT. DAY

The bathroom is bright and gaudily decorated. AMY HUNTER (23) is in the bath, blow-drying her hair. An toaster rests on the rim.

There is a knock at the door. AMY turns off the blow-dryer as GEMMA (27), her more mature housemate, steps in.

                             GEMMA
                Alex is here. 

                             AMY
                Okay, I’ll be about forty minutes.

GEMMA nods and walks out. As the door closes, ALEX’S disgruntled voice is audible outside the bathroom door.

Oblivious, AMY picks up the toaster, looks inside and shakes it. She then re-collects the blow-dryer and idly continues.


INT. EXPENSIVE RESTAURANT. NIGHT

ALEX and AMY sit opposite each other in the centre of a well-to-do restaurant. AMY is now in full evening-wear.

The leftover plates from the starter course have yet to be removed. ALEX is bored and does not hide it. 

                             AMY
                I love your car. (pause) Gemma says
                you’re dad owns the Gemini club? You
                must be loaded. I was in there a few 
                weeks back. Do you get many celebs?

ALEX looks longingly at the exit. 

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                I should go “powder my nose” before
                the main course.

AMY pats him affectionately on the shoulder and walks off.

ALEX sighs loudly then repeatedly bangs his head on the table. The WAITER (40) arrives and quietly removes the plates. Alex looks up.

                             ALEX
                             (contd)
                Excuse me. Do you do arsenic?

The WAITER pauses mid-collection and shakes his head. 

                             ALEX
                             (contd)
                Bleach? (pause) Nothing? Never mind.

The WAITER leaves with the plates.

AMY returns, daintily wiping the corner of her mouth, knocking over a wine glass as she sits down.

ALEX barely reacts as it shatters across his side of the table. AMY doesn’t notice as she straightens her top.

The WAITER returns with two salad dishes and places them down.

As the WAITER departs, AMY is still fiddling. ALEX looks from his food then to AMY’S, then to the shattered glass on the table.

He picks up a large chunk of broken glass and tosses it idly onto AMY’S plate. Again, she doesn’t notice.

AMY finishes messing with her clothes, picks up her fork, smiles at ALEX then proceeds to eat. ALEX frowns in bewilderment. 

                             AMY
                You got the parmesan one, didn’t 
                you? I’m allergic. 

ALEX is transfixed by the huge piece of glass AMY is unintentionally managing to eat around. He nods. 

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                That’s good. I thought I tasted cheese.

AMY puts down her fork and starts jabbing and eating the salad with her steak knife. After a moment she stops and clicks for the WAITER. He veers over, carrying a tray.

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                Yeah, hi garcon. What’s this?

AMY points to the hunk of glass, now covered in dressing. The WAITER is speechless.

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                I wanted Ranch, not Ceaser.

The WAITER bows and quickly removes the plate. 

                             AMY
                             (contd, to ALEX)
                You’re cute. (pause) Do you think 
                I’m cute? (pause) No, that’s stupid,
                don’t answer. Do you?

ALEX reluctantly nods. AMY smiles coyly. ALEX rolls his eyes again, but almost cracks a smile.


INT. BAR. NIGHT

A trendy 18-30s club. ALEX and AMY sit by the bar. ALEX is drinking lemonade; AMY is sipping from a giant cocktail glass. 

                             ALEX
                You know, alcohol poisoning is a myth. 
                People are only sick because their 
                bodies can’t handle the fun.

                             AMY
                             (enthralled)
                Is that true?

ALEX sips his drinks and nods. AMY looks to her own, impressed, then signals to the nearby BARMAN (28) for two more.


CUT TO:

INT. BAR. NIGHT

ALEX is sat in the same position at the bar; AMY sits beside him looking dishevelled. Four empty cocktail glasses rest on the bar.

                             AMY
                             (slurring)
                That’s why I don’t trust ‘em. Never
                trust journalists. They’re loser scum. 
                I feel sick.

AMY takes another swig then leans against ALEX and closes her eyes. ALEX breathes a sigh of relief.

ALEX looks to the BARMAN, presently chuckling to himself. 

                             BARMAN
                She always gets like this after five 
                or six drinks. 

                             ALEX
                Maybe she won’t talk so much. 

                             BARMAN
                You’d think. Except there’s no vodka
                in a Saint Clemens. She’s sober as a
                judge.

AMY immediately snaps awake, hops onto her feet and claps her hands. 

                             AMY
                So where to next? I’m buzzing!

ALEX gives the BARMAN a savage glance before leading AMY by the hand across the dance-floor.


INT. CAR. CITY HIGH STREET. NIGHT

ALEX drives along the quiet city streets, AMY in the passenger seat, idly playing with the glove compartment lock.

ALEX looks across and notices AMY isn’t wearing her seatbelt. He opens his mouth to speak then stops himself. He shrugs and continues driving.

The glove compartment falls open and a semi-automatic handgun falls into AMY’S lap.

She screams; ALEX swerves at the sudden noise, narrowly avoiding a lamppost. After straightening up, ALEX collects the handgun from AMY’S lap. 

                             ALEX
                It’s my brother’s air pistol. It’d 
                be harmless if it wasn’t broken. Now
                it’s just useless.

ALEX turns the gun on it’s side; a spring protrudes.


EXT. GARAGE FORECOURT. NIGHT

ALEX pulls up at a petrol pump and steps from his car. As he reaches for the fuel pump, he looks around.

The forecourt is busy; a police car is parked outside the shop and several people are inside queuing to pay. The CASHIER (38) is a disgruntled fat man.

ALEX looks back inside his car; AMY is pretending to shoot things with the BB gun. ALEX thinks for a moment then begins pumping fuel.

                             ALEX
                Hey – Amy! This is where my brother 
                works. You should go in and say hi. 
                He’s never met a celebrity.

AMY looks to the CASHIER then back to ALEX. ALEX waves to the CASHIER who, in return, gives a tentative wave back. 

With a mischievous smile, AMY steps from the car and walks across the forecourt, gun in-hand. ALEX turns away and begins whistling.

In the background, AMY steps into the petrol station shop and throws both hands in the air, trying to attract the CASHIER’S attention.

Everyone in the store looks over, including the policeman. ALEX continues to nonchalantly whistle and pump fuel.  

After a few moments he replaces the pump and turns around.

                             ALEX
                             (contd)
                Oh, for god’s sake!

AMY is signing autographs. After a while, she hugs the cashier, leaves money for the fuel and exits the shop. She walks happily across the forecourt back to ALEX’S car.

                             AMY
                Seems nice. Shall we?

ALEX closes his eyes, trying to regain some composure. He enters the vehicle. 


EXT. BRIDGE OVERPASS. NIGHT

ALEX’S car is parked beside a footbridge spanning the width of a large river. ALEX and AMY are mid-way across staring over the edge.

                             AMY
                Thanks for tonight. I had fun.

AMY looks to ALEX, silent and uninterested.

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                How about you?

ALEX shrugs. AMY follows his gaze down to the dark water. 

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                How deep do you reckon it is?

                             ALEX
                I dunno. Jump, find out.

                             AMY
                Jump?

                             ALEX
                Yeah. It’s not far. I think they’ve put
                A big pile of cushions at the bottom. 
                And some crash mats. 

                             AMY
                You really think I should?

                             ALEX
                             (faltering slightly)
                Yeah. I think it would be really... 
                funny...

ALEX finally catches her gaze – her face is a mixture of confusion and melancholy. He takes a deep breath.

                             ALEX
                             (contd)
                Look, I’m sorry. I dunno why I...

AMY suddenly leaps at ALEX, throws her arms around his neck and kisses him.

ALEX’S hands flail behind her – first panicking, then angry as his fists clench, then resignation as they fall limply by his side.

After a few seconds, AMY steps sheepishly back.

There is a long pause.

                             AMY
                Do you wanna come back to mine?

ALEX looks over his shoulder as though checking no-one is watching. He nods.


INT. ENTRANCE HALL. SPRUCE APARTMENT. NIGHT

The ground-floor apartment is even more spacious and cosmopolitan than ALEX’S own. ALEX and AMY quietly enter, both smiling. They remove their coats and kiss once more.

                             ALEX
                I, um... have something in the car
                I need to get. 

                             AMY
                Condoms?

                             ALEX
                My inhaler.

They share an amused, embarrassed silence. ALEX turns to walk back out.

                             AMY
                I’m gonna make some soup.


EXT. ROAD. OUTSIDE APARTMENT. NIGHT

ALEX opens his car door and reaches inside the glove compartment. A blue inhaler lies beside the BB gun.

He collects the inhaler but gives the gun a considering glance. After a few moments, he nods to himself, closes the glove and turns to head back inside.

An explosion rips the apartment apart; a fireball erupts through the open front door; all the windows in the building smash at once.

ALEX is thrown backwards and slams against his car.

The dust settles, the smoke clears. From the ground, ALEX stares aghast at the carnage.

Hysterical laughter echoes from across the street. ALEX turns to see GEMMA, dressed in full camouflage gear, emerging from a nearby shrub.

ALEX watches bewildered as GEMMA walks over and stands proudly beside him, watching the building burn. She leans against the car.

                             GEMMA
                             (contd)
                Go on. Tell me her last words. I bet
                they were shit.

ALEX is too bewildered to reply.


CUT TO:

EXT. ROAD. OUTSIDE APARTMENT. NIGHT

Emergency services have arrived; an ambulance is parked outside the smouldering apartment, GEMMA is sat in the back of a police car, still celebrating. 

The street is filled with people. GEORGE approaches ALEX, currently stood away from the gawking rabble, as the two interviewing POLICEMEN walk away.

                             ALEX
                Gas. Gemma left it on for hours. And 
                broke some pipes. And bought some 
                camping stoves. She was thorough.  

GEORGE pats him awkwardly on the shoulder.

AMY appears beside them, covered in rubble.

GEORGE steps back. ALEX does a double-take then throws his arms around her. 

                             AMY
                I was out back. I had to go round. 
                The house blew up. I knew I smelt 
                something funny in the kitchen.

ALEX remains holding her for several moments. GEORGE awkwardly turns to leave. 

                             AMY
                             (contd)
                So rain cheque on tonight? Same
                again soon?

ALEX retracts then nods. AMY smiles and turns to leave.

                             ALEX
                Um... there is one thing I need to 
                tell you. All that... earlier. 

                             AMY
                It’s been a long night. We’ve
                got plenty of time, right?

ALEX smiles in return. They wave each other goodbye and ALEX turns to approach GEORGE.

                             GEORGE
                So it went well, then?

                             ALEX
                She’s alive. That’s all.

ALEX and GEORGE return to the car.

In the background, AMY looks down the street before stepping onto the road. There is a sudden screech of tyres and AMY goes flying beneath the wheels of a 4X4 from the opposite direction. 

ALEX and GEORGE do not hear. They enter the car and drive away.

Reviews
so funny
Written by Zarker (6 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Yes - I loved this :) 
 
Some formatting errors and superflous info (ages in brackets for minor characters?), but really well written. Timing was good, dialog nice and punchy. I really laughed out loud at a few places. I really didn't see the end coming at all. 
 
really well done, I think I'll read this again :) 
Cheers
Again. So very good.....
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 5th December 2007
I can't add much to what I said in today's review to Apocalypse/Fantasy. So very good but hardly likely to elicit favourable reviews here.This is the same, only the moreso. Its very good. But the same thing. Again I reiterate; this is a a splendid lampoon on a genre. But you have to know what you are going to do with it. And move on. You are past assessment. You need the market. 
 
What you need is a ProCo. Its as simple as that.  
 
Slan!

Written by Livinginanattic (456 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Entertaining and funny. I thoroughly enjoyed the interplay between the characters. There were plenty of twists and turns in the plot and I was quite surprised when Amy reappeared after the explosion. Well done! 
 
Ben

Written by woody44 (775 comments posted) 9th December 2007
Smashing send up! I loved the Amy character, reminded me of course of the famous(or should that be infamous) WAGS. We are hit straight away with her character with the `I love Paris, great singer` line. The long-suffering Alex was well drawn out too. The breezy prose carries the reader along effortlessly and the ending is deliciously over the top - excellent Jon. 
 
Roger

Written by coosh (867 comments posted) 27th December 2007
Thoroughly enjoyed. Particularly the simple, clear and efficient set-up (Paris, blow-dryer, toaster, etc.) and you maintained the same level throughout. I take your point about "keeping the joke going" and "enough story" - I wondered along the lines of short, "indestructible Amy"-type sketches; in terms of extending it, I hit a cul-de-sac at Clouseau-style murder mysteries and "my daughter-in-law-to-be" plots, and decided maybe you got the length and idea just right - marvellous ending.

Written by Jamiee12 (10 comments posted) 29th April 2008
it was good i enjoyed it although there are a few criticisms. Firstly the plot is fine, you have a good story but the fact that he wants to kill a celebrity because hes on a date with her is just not beleivable you need a better reason. Also you need to be more clear about the characters and who they are. Depending on your target audience its highly unlikely someone in a black comedy would call someone a 'soulless, vacuous idiot'. Overall you have the basis for a great script you just need to put the work and effort in because at the moment its just not quite there.

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