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Prologue To Illyria
By Levi
04 December 2007
Hey. Thought I'd post the prologue to 'Twilight Illyria' - a novel of mine. The two characters referenced aren't mentioned again until the end of the story, but this exchange pretty much encapsulates the tone of the whole thing. I'd love a few reactions. It's deliberately very short...


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Once upon a time, there was nothing.
   No space, no life, nothing. 
   Not even emptiness. Because if there was emptiness people would start asking silly questions. The Evera Creators were too busy for silly questions. So nothing it was.
   'It's a bit boring,' one of them said.
   'Boring? It's perfect. There's no pain, war, famine, hunger - perfect.'
   'Yeah, but... come on, it doesn't do much.'
   The second Creator stepped back and tried to work out what existence was MEANT to do. 'I guess it could use something extra.'
   So the Evera Creators installed a spoiler and some flashing neon lights. Existence was looking pretty snappy. 
   'Okay. Now all we need is for something to happen.'
   'You're so picky! Fine what do you want?'
   'I'm not sure. This may take a while. What's the biggest thing you can imagine?'

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An Attempt at Reviewing
Written by Henry (57 comments posted) 4th December 2007
 
Starts with a catching first sentence.  
 
What is 'Evera'? Any explanation to the reader, or is that term explained later in the story? 
Do we have to know, at this stage? 
 
First impression from first reading: funny dialogue, funny situation.  
The Great Keystone Creators in Ancient Times: Illyria... 
 
OK, I agree – existence without add-ons is boring... you've got a point there. 
 
Amusing thing, looks good, reads good, sounds good. 
There's more to come, I trust? 
 
Maybe this is a silly review. Maybe you're too busy for silly reviews. 
Have a drink, then – cheers, Henry. 

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 4th December 2007
Heheh... Funny idea. It reminded me a little of the a piece from a book by Harry Mullisch, who is about the best known living Dutch writer, so you're in good company there. Yet yours is a lot funnier. 

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 4th December 2007
Liked this. I don't know if I could cope with a whole novel in the same tone, but so far, so snappy. 
 
Phil

Written by rui (150 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Enjoyed, but as an interlude I think rather than the main story, unless you are very confident at the Douglas Adams school of surreal humour. 
 
I'd love to read some other extracts.

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