And this is only the beginning of their troublesome relationship...
He gazed at the man who had just spoken.
“ The custom?”
“ You have been away too long. Have you forgotten about Conchobar’s right?”
“Conchobar’s right… Right of the first night, eh?”
He tried to suppress the feeling, but he saw the veins in his arms swell blue and felt his cheeks getting hot. The man staggered backwards and he saw how some of the servants left the room.
His left eye closed and his right one peering at the speaker, he heard how his breath turned into a hiss as if someone had poured a bucket of water upon the fire.
His fist closed tighter around the barbed spear and he noticed how the man in front of him trembled. His heart beat fiercely and he felt a growl escape his lips, an animal’s sound.
“ Setanta!”
It was Cathbad’s voice.
“ Setanta, control yourself. You are in the house of Conchobar here. Keep your war spasms for the battlefield.”
He turned towards the druid and pointed the weapon at the old man.
“ Conchobar shall not have Emer!”, he cried.
“ It is the custom of the Ulaid, Setanta. You have broken many rules and every time we have forgiven you, but this time even you should bow to the geisi of our tribe.”
“ Geisi? Geisi? What geis could harm me? I am the Hound of Culann. I’m the son of Lugh, immortal, invincible! Let Conchobar come here and compete with me.”
“ He is your foster-father. Show him respect.”
“ Foster-father…”
“ Son of Dechtire, sister-son of Conchobar, lower your spear. Now!”
There was something in the druid’s expression that showed he had a power beyond the warrior’s understanding and somehow he managed to overcome the anger.
“ I want you to be present there tonight, Cathbad.”
“ Where?”
“ In Conchobar’s bedroom. You will make sure he shall not touch a single hair of Emer.”
“ Setanta…”
“ He may sleep with her in one bed, but I shall place my sword between them and if Conchobar dares to even touch the iron of its blade, it shall draw blood.”
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She had undressed herself and entered the king’s bedroom. Here she stood before the two old men, Conchobar and Cathbad. The first one looked grim, the other was friendly.
“ Lie down Emer. I promised Setanta to make sure the king shall not touch you.”
She looked at the fearsome blade which lay on the bed. It was her lover’s weapon, the sword he used to hew off the heads of his opponents. The sword radiated fear and bloodshed, yet she had to sleep next to the dreadful thing.
“ Sleep well”, Cathbad said with a smile and he took his position at the end of the bed.
Soon Conchobar was snoring, but Emer could not find rest.
She looked at the shiny iron next to her and thought of this Aife.
Setanta had pressed this sword against her throat, so it was said, and then she had yielded, the woman warrior. They had made love. As a peace offering? Or had he forced her to? What had this Scatach taught her man? If only her father hadn’t ordered him to go to Scotland, he would still have been innocent. She would have been the first and only one to sleep with him.
What was this Aife like? A warrior woman couldn’t be pretty, could she? Probably muscular and fierce, with woad on her face and loose hair like a witch, unkempt and wild. A predator luring men into her nets, just like this Medb woman of Cruachan. Yes, she had to be like Medb, who slept with about anyone and raided the lands of the Ulaid.
What could her Setanta see in such a woman? Yet he had slept with her…
Emer looked at the king next to her. He was fat and he snored, but it was clear he must have been handsome when he was younger. At first she had been repulsed at the thought of having to sleep with him, yet if Setanta could sleep with Aife, then why could she not sleep with Conchobar? Was he the only one allowed to be jealous?
The first night of her marriage and here she lay awake, naked, next to an old king, with a sword between them and a druid constantly looking on, thinking of that other woman...
Setanta should know how much she endured just to be his wife…
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Yes... first review Written by Levi (31 comments posted) 4th December 2007 |
I liked this; the use of language is well-suited to the genre and avoids the temptation of being hyporbolic or over dramatic. Just a few things I would suggest - check your use of the word 'how' in the first section: "he saw how the veins..." "he heard how his breath..." and consider removing them. "He heard his breath..." etc - it was just a little niggly thing. Also, there's quite an abundance of rhetorical questions throughout the second section. I know they're easy and concise to write, but can get a little wearing. Consider expressing doubt, puzzlement, confusion & questioning some other way: "What was this Aife like?" --> "He pictured the Aife." ... Or something. Other than that, superbly written and very engaging.
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Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 4th December 2007 |
Thanks Levi. I'll check the 'how's and remove a few. As this was written during a break it wasn't properly proof read, and it's indeed a bit clumsy in a few places. I'll see what I can do about it. Thanks for the advice! |
A little confused Written by fellpony (1569 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
| I am not au fait with Irish legends, so I was confused by the name in the title (Cuchulainn) not being used at all in the piece except as The Hound of Culainn - I think you could make this clearer somewhere in the first section. It's very stark at present, which helps the narrative to sound like an Irish saga, but it wasn't clear that this was an ancient tale until some way into the first section; a brief touch of descriptive background here and there would give valuable clues about the characters and their setting. |
Cughulainn = Setanta Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Thanks for your review Sue. Cuchulainn is Setanta's nickname. His real name is Setanta (mac Sualtaim). Perhaps I could have named the piece "Setanta and Emer", yet somehow Cuchulainn sounded better. Hm yes, I supose I left out too much... The references to Scatach and Medb were perhaps not neccesary, for the main point was that Setanta had slept with Aife. In short: Setanta (Cuchulainn) courted Emer, but her father demanded that he should learn to fight with Scatach in Scotland. Now Scatach used to kill people who did not belong to her group, and Emer's father hoped he would die. Not so. Scatach accepted him in her group and tought him how to fight. During a campaign Setanta beat Scatach's arch enemy Aife and they had intercourse (from which Connla was born). On his return to Ireland the stuff above happened (although this is of course just my interpretation)... As for Medb: She was the queen of Connacht, slept with every man she liked and was the arch enemy of Conchobar... |
Eh!!?? Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Mouse, I don't know where you have got all this barmy Irish Gaelic Celtic codswollop from...But you should know that Sentanta... Sentanta?? What do you mean SENTANTA!!....The only Sentanta I know of is an International Sports Channel that co-operates with Sky and Virgin Media to provide up to nine Football Games per week on subscription. You can get Champions League as well as the Premiership and also take out one off games for Serie A and La Liguia. I can thoroughly recommend it. I have seen Manchester United v Blackburn; and Manchester Unitrd v Fulham in the last few days. Its fantastic!! I am looking forward to Manchester United v Liverpool; ooops! I meant Liverpool v Manchester United. For the bastards are at home. No matter. That will not save them. The scouse excrement will be trodden underfoot and wiped off the boots of United Supporters under the cold tap. Sentanta!!?? SENTANTA!! SENTANTA!!!!!! Slan!SENTANTA |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
I there is one thing you can say about mouse, it’s that he always gets his facts straight. A little research goes a long way! Cúchulainn (Irish "Hound of Culann"; also spelled Cú Chulainn, Cú Chulaind, Cúchulain, or Cuchullain) is an Irish mythological hero who appears in the stories of the Ulster Cycle, as well as in Scottish and Manx folklore. The son of the god Lugh and Deichtine, sister of the king of Ulster, he was originally named Sétanta, but gained his better-known name as a child after he killed Culann's fierce guard-dog in self-defence, and offered to take its place until a replacement could be reared. At the age of seventeen he defended Ulster single-handedly against the armies of queen Medb of Connacht in the epic Táin Bó Cúailnge ("The Cattle Raid of Cooley"). He is known for his terrifying battle frenzy or "warp spasm", in which he becomes an unrecognisable monster who knows neither friend nor foe. All the best, Sly! |
Written by rui (150 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Steve, superb research! Not in the least it helps me understand FM's work. So is this a relatively well known myth, or is mistaking history for a sports channel a common mistake? Bianfu! I enjoyed reading this: without knowing any of the history I was rather lost (knowledge of who the characters are is a must), but the story stands well on its own. Sex as diplomacy? Given the current house of politicians, it'll never catch on!
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Thanks all! Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Gerard: See the Táin Bó Cúailnge: Cuchulainn introduces himself to Conchobar as Setanta: "Cia th' ainm-seo?", ol Conchobar. " Sétanta mac Súaltaim & mac Dechtere..." And later receives the name Cuchulainn: "Bid Cú Chulaind t' ainm-siu íarom", or Cathbad Steve: Thanks for looking that up. I think I overlooked putting the details in. That's the main problem when one knows a story too well. To be honest I'll have to look the sword thing up though. Cathbad was keeping watch, yet that Cuchulainn put his sword in between the two is only something I heard (as I haven't read the original text of this part) Rui: Thanks. Well, Old Irish myths are full of sex used for politics: I may come back to Cuchulainn and Emer later, so I won't say to much about his encounters with women, but amongst those he rejected there was a certain Findabair, daughter of Medb, who was used as a prize to any warrior who could defeat Cuchulainn (as Medb found him pretty annoying...) |
To Gerard Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
| The quotes above are Old- rather than Modern-Irish, but I guess you can read them. If you want the whole text: The University College of Cork has a huge amount of texts online: http://www.ucc.ie/celt |
maith thu! Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Dear, Oh Dear! Oh Dear! Oh Dear! Mouse. You do need to learn how to take a joke! Even to recognise a joke!!!! But no matter. Other sour lemons have fallen for it bigtime. I am honoured you have taken the time and the trouble to research Ireland's fabulous past. You are so correct in your assumptions. My compliments to you. bhi cuidechata mthaith ann areir bheith ag deanamh suilt!! Maith tu! aol a bhfuil failte roimhe! Slan! |
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Oh Dear! Oh Dear! Oh Dear! Two lots of 'umble pie in one week! “I don't know where you have got all this barmy Irish Gaelic Celtic codswollop from” “You do need to learn how to take a joke!” Just how many reverse gears do you have on your tricycle, Gerald? Although I wonder, can you get a bicycle made for four people? Or would you just purchase two tandems? Sly!
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Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Hi Gerard and Steve. No problem. I was a bit surprised though, for of all people on this site I would expect Gerard to know this story best. But then, it is confusing, for in the Tain he is referred to as Cuchulainn even before he is called that name for the first time. Those old monks weren't very secure in their writing. C.C. or Q.Cul. would often do just as well to describe him. Glad you still did enjoy it. Go raibh maith agat
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Written by Phil (6629 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Okay, can't comment on the history, know nothing about it - and I can't afford subscription telly. Enjoyed this. Perhaps a little more context for readers less versed in Irish legend would have helped - but still a worthwhile read. A little quick to finish. It could have had more development throughout. Phil |
Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 5th December 2007 |
Thanks Phil. I'll make sure to give some more background info next time.  |
My kind of story Written by BedtimeStoryteller (100 comments posted) 7th December 2007 |
Kings, swords and Druids - my kind of story – though reading this, I’m finding it difficult to get into, and to figure out who is who, and I’m wondering if I’ve missed the first chapter. Talking of kings, swords and druids, have you read Bernard Cornwell’s ‘The Winter King’ and the books that follow? They’re brilliant. Ian
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Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 7th December 2007 |
Thanks Ian. I'm afraid you're not the only one who got a bit confused, judging from the other comments. I have not written another chapter of this, but I probably expected too much background either being known or unnecessary. So I should be more careful if I write another piece on this subject. It's based upon the Ulster Cycle, which is one of the great sources of Irish mythology (together with the Mythological Cycle and the Finn Cycle). Haven't read the book you mention, but I'll certainly look it up Thanks for your comment. |
Goodness - how many reviews??? Written by Josie (2721 comments posted) 15th December 2007 |
| It's attracting people with all the numbers of reviews Fledermaus. I must say that although I don't know too much about Irish legends, I enjoyed your story, but was worried about the girl catching cold with no clothes on. ha ha. I have also enjoyed reading your reviews. Very entertaining. |
Written by Fledermaus (3229 comments posted) 15th December 2007 |
Thanks Josie. The number of reviews is a bit misleading, for firstly I replied to all of them and secondly, there was this little debate about the name Setanta. I might come back to Cuchulainn and Emer some day, for their relationship was a rather stormy one and it would be nice to see the events of the Ulster Cycle from Emer's point of view for a change. |
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