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Poetry
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By hutmaster
05 December 2007
At times they whisper, shy as maiden aunts
In rough company, or roar loud and shrill
As a drunken uncle teasing with taunts
And slurred voice the effing awful two nil
Defeat of a team whose best fan he will,
He vows, be no bloody longer. Sometimes,
Biddable as perfect children, they fill
The edges of my lines with reasoned rhymes.
Silent witnesses yet accused of crimes
For not exactly saying what we mean,
While writers shrug the shrug of perfect mimes
Insisting that their ink-stained hands are clean.
We form them, join them, let them have our say,
Employ them though they’re never in our pay.

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Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 5th December 2007
A very well written piece of verse with thought betwixt the words. I do know about the drunken uncle. Seems we all do. 
 
I have often seen your verse on the site and wondered what on earth you do with it. Its no use leaving it here. 
 
Slan!
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Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Thank you, Gerard, and yes, those drunken uncles get everywhere, especially at Irish weddings and wakes when they insist on singing or telling those jokes which have the bride reddening or the corpse turning in the half-dug grave. 
 
As for my writing. I do nothing with it. I enjoy it as a hobby and am too diffident to send it out anywhere. Do you send your out? And if so, where? 
 
Anyway, thanks again for the comments and may you never become one of those inebriated uncles!! 
 
hm
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Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 5th December 2007
A good subject for a poem, and I have written on this particular subject many times. You have put a lot of thought into what you say and put the message over well. Have you read the poem I've just written about "Cruel Words" and forgiveness. This might interest you.
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Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Thanks, Josie. Good to hear from you. 
 
hm

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Very nice. Good metaphors, nice rhyme and flow. Particularly liked the "ink-stained hands" line.  
Agree with GC, your work is very good, and if you ever felt so inclined to send it somewhere I wouldn't hesistate if I were you.

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