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I Have Watched
By uche
05 December 2007
Cyprian Ekwensi was Africa's first novelist, although he never garnered enough accolades
like Achebe or Soyinka, but we cherish his matchless contributions to modern African novel.

I have watched the sky deepen,
Clouds foreshadow a stormy spell,
Earth open its tunnel throat,
Trees sit up with arms wide.  

I have watched rain clouds pile,
Like emotions that bear tidings,
Sky release its fickle frown,
Earth dream of harvests.


I have watched winds yank trees,
Rivers swell, and whisk, and froth,
All of nature roundly fused  
In fevers of expectation.


I have watched the mind go sober,
In the death of a miscarried storm,
And the quick brilliance of blue
Speak of hope’s frailty.


I have watched the course of stars,
The tyrants’ reign taper like smoke,
The muscle of iron slacken
At the poet’s willful voice.


I have watched the land’s (re)birth –  
Unfurl, slow, like parched tongues,
Like the waiting-for-a-messiah,
And like buds of late song…  


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Written by SammoR (132 comments posted) 5th December 2007
 
It's slow, lyrical, dreamy. I take it you're speaking from CE's point of view, reflecting over a fulfilling and rewarding life. The last paragraph hints at the hope for a better future. 
 
BTW, I didn;t know he'd died! I had to google him to check. 
 
We did 'The Drummer Boy' in Literature when I was in school.. first form I think.
Hello uche
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 5th December 2007
First, welcome to GW and how nice it is to have an African poet here. Your poem was beautifully done, full of description and imagination. I don't know too much about Cyprian Ekwensi but would like to for I have read what a wonderful writer he was, and he won so many awards for his work. What would you recommend to read first? Yes, he died in November this year, but he was 86 years of age, so he had a good long life and his name will be forever remembered. You are speaking of physical things in the natural world, but are you also reflecting on life? Are any of the words you have used Cyprian Ekwenski's words? Do they come from one of his poems? Too many questions.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Agree with Sammo and Josie that this is a well-written piece (love the first stanza), but I feel it drags on a bit without illuminating much on your theme. Perhaps introduce an explanation in your second half, to keep your reader reading? Also found the "I have watched" grew tired after a while, and the ellipsis at the end unnecessary. 
thank
Written by uche (44 comments posted) 9th December 2007
Sammo, Josie, and G, i appreciate all your wonderful comments and kindness. I've been on GW, but hibernated due to some personal challenges - part of which inspired this poem; a reflection on life.  
 
I liked the Drummer Boy best, then Jagua Nana, and Jagua Nana's Daughters are also good books written by the late CE. 
 
I'll review the poem in the light of your suggestions, G. 
 
Thanks again. :roll

Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 9th December 2007
Some striking imagery in this, uche. Reads like the long song of an ancient guardian over the eternal skies and the follies and foibles of mankind.  
The reflective voice seems not to judge or condemn but to comment and maybe help 
'the muscle of iron slacken 
at the poet's willful voice'. 
A thoughtful and delightfully image-laden read. 
 
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