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Gale is Dead
By audrie
06 December 2007
This was a poem I wrote back in 1973 (before you were all born!)

It was after seeing a documentary, Gale is Dead, on the BBC about a young girl, Gabrielle, who was known as Gale. She was a beautiful child but when she was a young teenager, she took her own life.

The verses tell the story. I wrote it as a song and the last verse was the bridge. I think it is really not needed, agreed?
 
I fished this out after reading Hutmaster's poem of the boy locked in a chicken coop.
The terrible things the human race does to children!

What made you do it, Gabrielle
Did you think nobody cared
Was the sadness in your soul
Just too much for you to bear?

When abandoned as a baby
Did you little mind receive
Thoughts and feelings of rejection
Filling you with heart's unease?

Pushed around from Home to Home
Fostered out both here and there
Always searching for the love
You're own true mother did not bear.

Everyone was much too busy
Passed you on from place to place
Could not see the dark despair
Behind the blank and guarded face.

What made you choose that night to run
Out into the driving rain
Drawn towards the raging river
Heart and mind so full of pain.

What made you do it, Gabrielle,
Could this be the reason
That in the springtime of your life
Love...yes Love... was out of Season?

Gabrielle, Gabrielle,
We should have known you were so blue
Gabrielle, gabrielle,
We must all share the blame for you.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Very good poem. And yes that's long before I was born. Sad... Very sad. And it also underlines why we should have a lot of respect for parents who do care.

Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 6th December 2007
A lovely tribute to one who died so young. Sadly the rate of suicide seems to be on the up again and that type of despair is just so difficult to comprehend. 
Love out of season? A great line. 
 
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Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 6th December 2007
how very, very sad this piece is, a good write

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Thanks for your comments. I know after I saw the documentary that I cried long afterwards. Such a waste. 
 
The trouble is of course, that such pain is hidden until it is too late. I can remember being the life and soul of the party, then going home and wishing to end it all, when I was in my teens. 
 
Parents are so stunned when their 'supposedly happy' children commit suicide, but that is because they only see what's on the surface. It's a catch 22 situation.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 6th December 2007
These stories pop up every so often. Tragic though they are, it wasn't until I became a parent that I felt the full force of it all. Parenthood gives a new perspective to many things. 
 
Phil

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 7th December 2007
How right you are, Phil. I know I'm no poet, I can string a few verses together, but that's it. Short stories being my metier, but if something affects you strongly, it seems this is a good way of quickly ranting about it.
Delicate and sensitive
Written by Karenhoffen (37 comments posted) 10th January 2008
This is a beautiful piece of writing. As a foster carer I feel it captures the traumas that some children experience. 
 
I don't think you need the bridge at the end, in fact, I think it spoils/trivialises what is a delicately written and sensitive piece. The last line of the main part of the poem, gives a jolt, a pause that pulls the whole poem together.

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