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Poetry
Indiana
By Amelia
06 December 2007
My mother's family has been on Cape Cod since the pilgrims came, and that's where we live. But my father's family lives in Indiana.

I was born on this rock-strewn
lonesome spit of sand in the east, but
this is not my home.

I go home every April:
April, when lace-white dogwood and
blushing redbud feed their blooms from the fertile earth
of Indiana

My father’s family is steady,
as rooted to the farm as the old oil lines,
and rows and rows and rows of corn.

My heart is three thousand acres,
knotted with forest, sliced by streams
and hiding old horse-jumps from my father’s youth
in its earthy folds.

Every April, every April,
I come home.

Reviews

Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Lovely, I really liked this. How does your Mum feel about it?

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Very nice. I wouldn't know what most states of the US look like, especially not those in the middle which one doesn't see on TV that often... Indiana sounds like a pleasant place.

Written by Josie (2732 comments posted) 6th December 2007
I agree. Your writing is lovely here. I really enjoyed reading it.

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 6th December 2007
a nice good read

Written by seaJane (23 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Loved this.  
 
My only comment would be on this line here 
 
Quote:
blushing redbud feed their blooms from the fertile earth

 
 
I always read poems aloud when I like them, and this one just seemed too long by an adjective.

Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 6th December 2007
Really liked this Amelia. It had a lovely, unpretentious cadence to it. 
 
SeaJane has a point. The line she mentions does break the flow a little. Worth a look? 
 
Phil.

Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 7th December 2007
This is a love poem to family, landscape and memory. What I like is the 'between the lines' arrival at a place and time where the heart becomes at ease, where the sense of place overwhelms with a placidity and contentment which the narrator communicates with simple, yet highly effective language. 
Personal and family history is tied to a locality that is drawn with few strokes but comes alive in the intensity of recalled emotion. 
I think this works very well, Amelia. Maybe, as others have suggested , a little tightening would help but it leaves this reader with pleasing and well drawn images. 
 
hm

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