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Poetry
Sheet Music
By hutmaster
07 December 2007
A jawbox is a colloquial word for an old fashioned, white enamel sink. 

Jawbox bubbled to sudsy brim.
Water warm as she could stand
she'd steep the sheets,
curls flopping like springs
over brownest eyes.

I'd help her wring.
We wrung until the sheets squeaked,
closing the distance between us.
Maybe she'd sing a song
her mother had sung to her;
an air of love,
old as wind through whin,
plaintive and sweet,
her voice soft
as wash-day breeze.

On drying days,
the old notes still ring,
closing the distance between us.

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Hi
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 7th December 2007
a lovely write

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 7th December 2007
Ahhhh! Lovely, very atmospheric.

Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 8th December 2007
Thank you maipenrai and audrie. I enjoyed writing this poem. Sometimes it seems that the most mundane of subjects offer themselves to be investigated in poetry. 
 
hm
Very Nice
Written by Ghost (21 comments posted) 8th December 2007
I really liked this one, fabulous first line. :)

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 8th December 2007
'Nothing wrong with this,' I was thinking as I read, 'But nothing special,' - until I got to the last three lines which raise it above the ordinary. Liked it. 
 
Phil
First line, last lines.
Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 11th December 2007
Thank you, Ghost. I always think the first line is the most difficult to judge, so I'm delighted that you thought it worked well. 
 
Phil. Whew! I'm grateful that you hung on until those last lines. 
 
hm

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 14th December 2007
What a good title for your poem. I loved the homeliness of it all. Reminds me of the time when we folded the sheets together, and when we brought top to bottom, we'd kiss in the middle. ahhh!

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